Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it's a bit repetitive and slightly unnatural in phrasing. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repeating verbs (e.g., "taking pictures" and "photography"), and use one or two specific examples. Use a linking phrase to add detail smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photography because it lets me document places I visit. For example, I like capturing city skylines at dusk and close-up shots of greenery in parks, which help me remember both the atmosphere and the small details.

Suggestion: Good specific examples and clear preference. Improve by making the topic sentence more natural, fixing minor phrasing (use "prefer" not "would prefer" for habitual preference), and tightening wording. Include a linking word to connect reason and examples.

Example: I prefer rural areas because they offer a variety of scenes. For instance, I can take close-up photos of flowers and wide-angle shots of the sea, which gives me more creative options.

Suggestion: The idea is clear but the answer is repetitive and wordy. Avoid repeating "in other countries" and refine the reason. Provide one specific example of a memorable foreign view to make the answer more vivid, and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel more novel and memorable. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed a temple garden at sunrise — that unique light and architecture made the image unforgettable.

× For me I really enjoy photography and taking pictures of different views.

✓ For me, I really enjoy photography and taking pictures of different views.

Missing comma after introductory phrase 'For me' improves sentence flow and clarity; this is a punctuation issue that doesn't change verb form but helps readability. Add a comma after 'For me'. Suggestion: Insert a comma after introductory elements such as 'For me,'.

× Allow me to document the places that I have been to, especially the city view and the greenery in nature.

✓ I like to document the places I have been to, especially cityscapes and natural greenery.

'Allow me' is unnatural in this context; it's imperative and doesn't fit the answer. 'City view' is better as 'cityscapes' and 'the greenery in nature' is awkward—use 'natural greenery'. Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'been'. Suggestion: Use natural phrasing like 'I like to document' and concise nouns 'cityscapes' and 'natural greenery'.

× I would prefer rural areas because there are multiple kinds of views for me to take photos of, such as the close up shots of flowers or the wide angle view of the entire sea view.

✓ I prefer rural areas because there are many kinds of views to photograph, such as close-up shots of flowers or wide-angle views of the sea.

'I would prefer' is acceptable but simple present 'I prefer' is more natural when stating a general preference. 'There are multiple kinds of views for me to take photos of' is wordy; use 'many kinds of views to photograph'. 'Close up' and 'wide angle' need hyphens as compound adjectives before nouns. Remove redundant 'entire sea view'—use 'sea'. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer' for general preferences, hyphenate compound adjectives (close-up, wide-angle), and simplify redundant phrases.

× I would prefer views in other countries because by documenting other countries, I'm able to record anything mesmerizing that I have been to in other countries that I've traveled to.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because by documenting them I can record anything mesmerizing I encountered while traveling.

Again use simple present 'I prefer' for general preference. The original repeats 'other countries' and uses awkward structures: 'record anything mesmerizing that I have been to' is ungrammatical—one 'records' experiences or sights, not 'been to'. Use 'encountered while traveling'. Also replace 'I'm able to' with 'I can' for conciseness. Suggestion: Avoid repetition, use correct collocations (encountered sights), and prefer concise modal forms like 'I can'.