Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid filler phrases like “for me personally” and “so yeah.”

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I often stop to photograph coastal sunsets and city skylines because they remind me of the places I visit and help me remember the mood of the day.

Suggestion: Improve coherence and vocabulary: correct small mistakes (e.g. 'Urban Air' -> 'urban areas'), use clearer linking words (e.g. 'because' and 'however') and avoid vague phrases like 'and so on.' Give one specific example and one brief reason.

Example: I prefer urban views because I grew up in the city and enjoy its skyline and architecture. For instance, I like photographing skyscrapers and bustling streets since they feel energetic and full of life, whereas rural landscapes often seem too calm for my taste.

Suggestion: Be precise and avoid repetition: state your preference clearly, give a specific reason and an example, and remove filler words like 'I feel like' repeated. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to make your answer coherent.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because Mongolia offers wide, dramatic landscapes. For example, I love photographing the open steppe and rolling hills, which I find more striking than many foreign cityscapes.

× I prefer Urban Air, urban views because I grew up in the city and I feel most comfortable with its skyline and architecture.

✓ I prefer urban areas, urban views because I grew up in the city and I feel most comfortable with their skyline and architecture.

The original sentence used 'Urban Air' incorrectly and capitalized 'Urban' mid-sentence. 'Urban areas' or 'urban views' should be lowercase; 'their' is needed to match the plural noun 'urban areas' and correctly refer to 'skyline and architecture'. Suggestion: use lowercase for common adjectives and ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent.

× For example, I enjoy looking at skyscrapers and busy streets because they feel lively and exciting, whereas rural scenery feels too quiet for my taste as it is just mountains and trees and so on.

✓ For example, I enjoy looking at skyscrapers and busy streets because they feel lively and exciting, whereas rural scenery feels too quiet for my taste because it mainly consists of mountains and trees.

The phrase 'as it is just mountains and trees and so on' is informal and awkward. Replacing 'as' with 'because' and using 'mainly consists of' creates a clearer, grammatically correct explanation. Suggestion: avoid 'and so on' in formal answers and use precise language.

× I prefer views in my own country more than other countries because I feel like, well, Mongolia has to offer with its wide landscape and vast areas.

✓ I prefer views in my own country to those in other countries because Mongolia offers wide landscapes and vast areas.

The original 'prefer... more than' with 'views in my own country more than other countries' is awkward; standard structure is 'prefer A to B' and 'those' refers back to 'views'. Also 'has to offer with' is incorrect; use 'offers'. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and 'offers' to describe what a country provides.

× I feel like the nature scenery is more beautiful in my opinion.

✓ I think the natural scenery is more beautiful, in my opinion.

'Nature scenery' is nonstandard; use 'natural scenery'. Also starting with 'I feel like' then adding 'in my opinion' is redundant. Suggestion: say 'I think' or 'In my opinion' but not both, and use correct adjective 'natural'.