Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms (e.g., 'sculpture' → 'sculpted' or 'ornamented').

Example: I enjoy photographing different views, especially architectural and historic buildings. For example, I like capturing intricately sculpted facades of churches and old temples because their details and textures tell stories about the past.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and natural phrases (e.g., 'I prefer urban areas because I can capture city life'). Avoid awkward or redundant expressions.

Example: I prefer urban areas because I can capture vibrant city life and architecture. For instance, I enjoy photographing busy streets with cars and bicycles and candid shots of people commuting, which show the energy of the city.

Suggestion: Avoid vague and grammatically incorrect phrases. State your preference clearly, then give balanced, specific reasons without overgeneralizing. Replace informal fillers ('uh') and incorrect words ('using other country') with natural expressions.

Example: I prefer photographing views in other countries because many sites are well maintained and less polluted, making them more picturesque. For example, I visited a coastal town abroad where the clean beaches and preserved buildings offered many great photo opportunities.

× I have a good interest in photographing.

✓ I am very interested in photography.

The phrase 'have a good interest in photographing' is awkward and uses 'photographing' incorrectly. Use 'interested in' + noun or 'interested in' + gerund. 'Interested in photography' is the natural expression. Use 'am very interested in' to convey degree.

× Mostly I like to take photos of this architectural building, those historic views like how the buildings has been sculpture, those are all I really like to capture.

✓ Mostly I like to take photos of architectural buildings and historic views, like the sculptures on the buildings; those are the kinds of things I really like to capture.

Several errors: 'this architectural building' should be plural or general 'architectural buildings' when speaking generally. 'the buildings has been sculpture' is ungrammatical: subject-verb agreement and wrong noun choice. Use 'sculptures on the buildings' or 'how the buildings are sculpted.' Also replace 'those are all I really like to capture' with 'those are the kinds of things I really like to capture.'

× And this is mostly visit some churches, some heritages, but all the historical buildings like old temples and everything.

✓ I mostly visit churches, heritage sites, and historical buildings like old temples.

The original sentence has incorrect structure ('this is mostly visit') and awkward phrasing ('some heritages'). Use simple present 'I mostly visit' followed by parallel nouns: 'churches, heritage sites, and historical buildings like old temples.'

× Yeah, I basically prefer urban areas because there I can capture the city views.

✓ Yes, I basically prefer urban areas because I can capture city views there.

Word order is awkward; move 'there' after the object for natural English: 'I can capture city views there.' Also prefer 'Yes' to 'Yeah' in formal speech, though 'yeah' can be conversational.

× I love the buildings of how they have a constructed this fast-paced life of moving cars, moving bikes and the people who are all busy hearing music and crossing the streets.

✓ I love the buildings and how they are part of this fast-paced life of moving cars and bikes, and people who are busy listening to music and crossing the streets.

Original mixes forms: 'they have a constructed' is incorrect. Use 'how they are part of' or 'how they were constructed.' 'Moving bikes' should be 'moving bikes' or 'motorbikes' and 'hearing music' should be 'listening to music.' Ensure parallel structure and correct verb forms.

× These are all I like very much.

✓ I really like all of these things.

Word order and emphasis: 'These are all I like very much' is awkward. Use 'I really like all of these things' for natural word order.

× Yeah, I prefer using other country, uh, because, uh, those that we have are stunning visualization, scenic places which are all not at all polluted.

✓ Yes, I prefer visiting other countries because the places there are stunning and scenic, and not polluted.

'Prefer using other country' is incorrect; use 'prefer visiting other countries' or 'prefer other countries.' 'Those that we have' is vague; replace with 'the places there.' 'Stunning visualization' is incorrect collocation; use 'stunning and scenic.' Also fix pluralization and article usage.

× Uh, those are all well maintained and easily accessible for all the people.

✓ They are well maintained and easily accessible to everyone.

Use 'they' to refer back to 'places' and 'to everyone' is more natural than 'for all the people.' Also 'well maintained' should be hyphenated only in some contexts, but adjective phrase is fine.

× Uh, but in my own country those are all polluted, uh.

✓ But in my own country, those places are polluted.

Clarify 'those' as 'those places' and place comma after introductory 'But in my own country.' Keep tense present simple 'are polluted.'