Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small grammatical errors, and add one specific example to support why you enjoy photography. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make your response coherent.

Example: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photography is one of my main hobbies. For example, when I visited Kyoto last year I photographed temple gardens and city streets, which helps me remember the atmosphere of the trip. I usually use a DSLR and try to capture light and composition carefully.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'urban areas give me dramatic architecture' not 'denied'). Structure the answer: state preference (both), then briefly contrast with clear reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'while'. Provide one concrete detail for each to be specific.

Example: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. Urban areas have dramatic architecture and interesting skylines for street and skyline photography, while rural areas connect me to nature with wide fields and peaceful scenery, which are great for landscape shots.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first and avoid unclear phrasing like 'I'm unable to see how different things happen.' Explain with a clear reason and one specific example comparing the two. Use linking words such as 'however' and 'for example' to improve coherence.

Example: I prefer both, but I often enjoy views in other countries because traveling lets me discover different cultures and landscapes. For example, photographing markets in Morocco felt very different from scenes at home and taught me new ways to frame people and buildings; however, I also appreciate familiar spots in my own country for their personal meaning.

× Honestly, I love taking pictures and it's one of my hobbies.

✓ Honestly, I love taking pictures, and it's one of my hobbies.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Add comma for correct punctuation and sentence clarity. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'and' when connecting two independent clauses.

× So whenever I travel I want to take pictures of the I want to take shots of the different views of the things I see because it helps me to remember the moment I had during that travel.

✓ So whenever I travel, I want to take pictures of the different views I see because it helps me remember the moments I had during my travels.

Original sentence is repetitive and contains redundant fragments ('I want to take' repeated, extra 'the', awkward phrasing). Correct by removing repetition, adding commas, using plural 'moments' and 'travels' for natural expression. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same clause; combine ideas into a single clear clause and match plural nouns when speaking about multiple experiences.

× I have a good camera and I love the game.

✓ I have a good camera, and I love photography.

The noun 'game' is incorrect in this context; 'photography' correctly names the hobby. Also add comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: Use the precise noun that matches the activity.

× To be honest with you, I prefer both to views the urban areas gives me more more denied architectural buildings with different skylines, different train.

✓ To be honest with you, I prefer both: the views in urban areas give me more varied architectural buildings with different skylines and trains.

Multiple issues: incorrect preposition sequence and article use ('prefer both to views'), subject-verb disagreement (views give), word choice ('denied' -> 'varied'), and missing punctuation. Correct by restructuring the sentence and fixing verb agreement. Suggestion: State 'I prefer both' then clarify with a colon or separate clauses; ensure subject and verb agree and choose correct adjectives.

× But the world gives me rural, connects me more to the environment and I love both the.

✓ But the rural areas connect me more to the environment, and I love both.

Original has incorrect word order and agreement ('the world gives me rural' is ungrammatical) and an extra 'the' at the end. Replace with 'rural areas connect' to match plural subject and correct verb. Suggestion: Use 'rural areas' as the subject and ensure the verb 'connect' matches the plural noun; remove stray articles.

× To be honest, I prefer both these in other countries I tend to explore.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both. In other countries, I tend to explore more.

Run-on sentence lacking proper separation and punctuation. Split into two sentences and add comma after introductory phrase; add 'more' to complete the idea. Suggestion: Use short sentences or proper punctuation to separate distinct ideas.

× I'm unable to see how different things happen in different country.

✓ I'm able to see how different things happen in different countries.

The phrase 'unable to see' contradicted intent; context suggests the student can see differences, so use 'able'. Also 'country' should be plural 'countries' when referring generally. Ensure agreement and accurate meaning. Suggestion: Use plural 'countries' for general statements and match verb meaning to context.

× But notwithstanding my home country too, I love everything in my home country and.

✓ But I also love everything about my home country.

The phrase 'But notwithstanding my home country too' is awkward and ends with an extra 'and'. Simplify to a clear clause 'I also love everything about my home country.' Suggestion: Use concise, direct phrasing and avoid trailing conjunctions.