Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Nói rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và giảm tiếng ấp úng (umm). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cảnh bạn chụp hoặc cảm giác chính xác bạn có được). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (for example, because, so). Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me relax after a long day. For example, I often take photos of cityscapes and parks when I feel tired, as the activity makes me focus on small details and forget my stress.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Trình bày ý chính rõ ràng (urban or rural) và dùng từ chính xác (e.g., 'rural' vs 'urban'). Tránh mâu thuẫn trong câu và giảm tiếng ngập ngừng. Thêm lý do cụ thể và liên từ để nối ý (e.g., "because", "so"). Giữ ngắn gọn và mạch lạc.

Example: I prefer rural views because I can see the sunrise and natural landscapes more clearly. For example, in the countryside there is less light pollution, so the colors of the sky and the scenery are much more vivid.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Nói câu chủ đề trực tiếp về ưu tiên (own country or other countries). Sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng (e.g., 'scenery' not 'screenery') và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về điểm khiến bạn thích cảnh ở Việt Nam. Dùng một hoặc hai câu phụ để giải thích cảm xúc. Giữ mạch rõ ràng và ít hơn 5 câu.

Example: I prefer the views in my own country, Vietnam, because I love its diverse landscapes and cultural scenery. For example, the rice terraces, coastal beaches and historic towns all offer unique photo opportunities that remind me of home.

× Umm for me taking picture is one of the most special activity when I'm film exhausted or straight after a day umm and will help me feel better.

✓ Umm for me, taking pictures is one of the most special activities when I'm feeling exhausted or straight after a long day, and it helps me feel better.

Errors: 'taking picture' needs plural 'pictures' and 'taking' correctly used but noun needs plural; 'one of the most special activity' should be 'one of the most special activities' (singular/plural issue); 'I'm film exhausted' should be 'I'm feeling exhausted' (incorrect wordform and missing present participle); 'straight after a day' unclear, change to 'straight after a long day' for naturalness; 'and will help me feel better' should be 'and it helps me feel better' to match present habitual tense. Suggestion: use gerund 'taking' with plural noun when referring generally, use present participle 'feeling' after 'I'm', and keep verb tense consistent for habitual actions.

× Definitely UMM, I'm a big fan of real in urban area because I cannot see the umm sunrise uh clearly than in the rural area.

✓ Definitely, umm, I'm a big fan of urban views because I cannot see the sunrise as clearly in the city as I can in rural areas.

Errors: 'big fan of real in urban area' is ungrammatical — likely meant 'urban views' or 'city views' (word choice/adjective use); 'in urban area' should be 'in urban areas' (article and plural); 'cannot see the sunrise uh clearly than in the rural area' needs comparative structure 'not as clearly ... as' and plural 'rural areas'. Suggestion: use 'as ... as' for comparisons, use plural when speaking generally, and choose correct noun 'views' rather than 'real'.

× For me, I like my country Vietnam here very beautiful screenery, although the screen in all the country it very different for me. But I'm a love my country, so I'm really.

✓ For me, I like my country, Vietnam; it has very beautiful scenery, although scenery in each part of the country is different to me. But I love my country, so I really do.

Errors: 'Vietnam here very beautiful screenery' has word order and spelling mistakes — 'it has very beautiful scenery' is correct; 'screenery' should be 'scenery'; 'the screen in all the country it very different for me' is ungrammatical: use 'scenery in each part of the country is different to me' (correct subject-verb and preposition); 'But I'm a love my country, so I'm really.' mixes forms — use 'I love my country, so I really do.' Suggestion: correct noun spelling, ensure subject-verb agreement, use clear clause structure and avoid redundant pronouns.