Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Shorten and organize your answer into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix small grammar issues (e.g., “up close up picture” → “close-up photos”). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Be specific about what excites you (colors, patterns, atmosphere) to add content depth.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially both urban and rural landscapes. For example, I like urban scenes for their dynamic architecture and busy streets, while rural areas appeal to me because of their tranquil fields and rich natural colors. I also enjoy close-up photos of insects and plants because of their intricate details.

Suggestion: Start directly with your preference and avoid unnecessary conjunctions (remove “although” or “but” together). Correct vocabulary errors (“builds” → “buildings”; “flash cars” → “flashy cars” or “luxury cars”). Reduce filler words (uh). Add a specific reason with one linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”).

Example: I prefer urban areas because I find the architecture and street life more exciting. For example, cities offer diverse buildings, bustling markets and interesting people, and you can often find striking modern or historic architecture and luxury cars that create dynamic photo opportunities.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar: avoid repeating “in other countries” and fix article/word order errors (“I like views the New Zealand” → “I like views in New Zealand”). Give one or two specific reasons why you prefer foreign views (different landscapes, cultures, architecture) and use a linking phrase like “for example.”

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they offer landscapes and cultures I don’t see at home. For example, I love New Zealand’s dramatic mountains and Vietnam’s vibrant street scenes, and I’m also fascinated by the colorful towns and coastlines of Argentina, Chile and Uruguay.

× I just like to take up close up picture of insects, animals as well as plants as well.

✓ I just like to take close-up pictures of insects, animals, and plants as well.

The phrase 'up close up picture' is ungrammatical; use the adjective 'close-up' with a hyphen before the noun and plural 'pictures' to match 'insects, animals, and plants'. Also include the conjunction 'and' and commas for list clarity. Use 'take close-up pictures' (verb + noun) rather than incorrect '-ing' forms.

× Both of them excite me and I just like to take up close up picture of insects, animals as well as plants as well.

✓ Both of them excite me, and I just like to take close-up pictures of insects, animals, and plants as well.

Using 'Both of them' is acceptable if referring to two categories, but the sentence combines multiple issues: repetition 'as well as ... as well' is redundant. Replace with 'and' and remove duplicate 'as well'. Clarify plural 'pictures' to agree with multiple items.

× Although I like builds in both urban areas and rural areas, but I personally prefer urban areas over rural areas because urban areas are more interesting to me.

✓ Although I like buildings in both urban and rural areas, I personally prefer urban areas because they are more interesting to me.

Do not use both 'Although' and 'but' together—this is redundant. Use either 'Although ... , I ...' or 'I like ... but I prefer ...'. Also 'builds' is incorrect; use 'buildings'. Replace 'urban areas are more interesting to me' with 'they are more interesting to me' to avoid repetition.

× Like there's more people, uh, more facilities and more flash cars.

✓ For example, there are more people, more facilities, and flashier cars.

'There's' (there is) is singular and incorrect with plural 'people' (subject-verb agreement); use 'there are'. 'Flash cars' is incorrect adjective use—use 'flashier cars' or 'more flashy cars' to compare. Avoid filler 'uh' in responses.

× I like views the New Zealand and Vietnam.

✓ I like the views in New Zealand and Vietnam.

Missing preposition 'in' and incorrect use of article: include 'the views in' before the country names. 'I like views the New Zealand and Vietnam' is ungrammatical; correct order is 'the views in New Zealand and Vietnam'.

× I personally prefer views in other countries because the views in other countries are more interesting to me.

✓ I personally prefer views in other countries because they are more interesting to me.

Repetition of 'the views in other countries' is wordy; replace the second occurrence with the pronoun 'they'. No major preposition error here, but simplify for naturalness.

× As far as a few countries in Latin America, especially Argentina, Chile and Uruguay, they're all beautiful countries.

✓ A few countries in Latin America, especially Argentina, Chile, and Uruguay, are all beautiful.

The phrase 'As far as a few countries in Latin America' is awkward. Start directly with 'A few countries in Latin America...' and avoid comma splice; ensure subject 'A few countries...' matches verb 'are'. Also include serial comma for clarity.