Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は意味は伝わりますが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な表現があります。具体的には“such as include such a selfie and the scenery of the beautiful ocean mountain” の部分が不自然です。改善点は：1) 主題文で直接答える（例：Yes, I enjoy taking photos.）。2) 複数の例を挙げるときは接続語で整理する（for example / such as / and）。3) 名詞句は単数・複数と語順に注意する（the beautiful ocean and mountains）。4) 3〜4文でまとめ、冗長さを避ける。これらに気を付けて、より自然で流暢な短い答えを練習してください。

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos. When I travel, I usually take many pictures, for example selfies and scenic shots of the ocean and mountains. I like to capture memories so I can look back on my trips later.

Suggestion: この回答は意味が分かりにくく、文法や語彙の誤用が多いです（“I'm not really a couple of years”、“researchers”など不適切な語）。改善点は：1) まず明確に好みを述べる（I prefer rural areas.）。2) 理由を一つか二つ簡潔に述べる（because it feels refreshing; there is open space and nature）。3) 接続語（because, so, therefore）を正しく使う。4) 文を3〜4文にまとめる。これらを意識して、はっきりした理由と具体例を入れて答えてください。

Example: I prefer rural areas. I find the open space and natural scenery, like mountains and wide skies, very refreshing. Because of that, I like to take photos there to keep memories of the peaceful atmosphere.

Suggestion: 内容は理解できますが、不自然な語や文のつながりが目立ちます（“viewers of in other countries”、“age country”）。改善点は：1) まず明確に答える（I prefer views in other countries.）。2) 理由を具体的に述べる（I enjoy discovering different cultures and scenery）。3) 写真を撮る目的を簡潔に説明（to remember short trips）。4) 接続語を自然に使う（because, so, thereforeは一つに絞る）。文法と語順を修正して、より簡潔に述べる練習をしてください。

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I love discovering different cultures and landscapes. Since I often take short trips, taking photos is a great way to remember the places I visit. Photos help me recall the atmosphere and special moments from my travels.

× When I go to travel, I definitely take a lot of pictures such as include such a selfie and the scenery of the beautiful ocean mountain.

✓ When I travel, I definitely take a lot of pictures, such as selfies and the scenery of beautiful oceans and mountains.

The phrase 'go to travel' is awkward; use 'travel'. 'Such as include such a selfie' incorrectly mixes 'such as' and 'include' and repeats 'such'; use 'such as selfies'. Nouns for landscapes should be plural when general: 'oceans and mountains'. Also remove unnecessary articles: 'the scenery of the beautiful ocean mountain' should be 'the scenery of beautiful oceans and mountains' or simply 'the scenery of oceans and mountains'. Suggestions: use 'travel' instead of 'go to travel', use 'such as' followed directly by examples, make landscape nouns plural for general references.

× Because I'm not really a couple of years, so it is very refreshing to see rural areas in the researchers, beautiful mountains and sky.

✓ Because I am not used to city life, it is very refreshing to see rural areas, with their beautiful mountains and skies.

The original sentence is incoherent: 'I'm not really a couple of years' is ungrammatical and likely intended to mean 'not used to city life' or 'not from here'. 'So' is redundant after 'Because' and creates a sentence structure error. 'in the researchers' is meaningless here; likely intended 'there' or 'their'. Also 'sky' should be plural 'skies' when speaking generally. Suggestions: express the contrast clearly ('not used to city life'), avoid using both 'Because' and 'so' together, and use correct possessive 'their' for rural areas.

× So I try to keep memories by.

✓ So I try to preserve memories by taking photos.

The fragment 'keep memories by' is incomplete; it lacks the method or object. Add the method 'taking photos' to complete the sentence. Suggestions: ensure every sentence has a clear verb and object; here 'preserve memories by taking photos' is natural.

× Yes, I prefer the viewers of in other countries because I love traveling very much, but I can't stay for a long time in age country.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in other countries because I love traveling very much, but I can't stay for a long time in each country.

'the viewers of in other countries' misuses 'viewers' instead of 'views' and has extra prepositions. 'age country' is likely a misrecognition of 'each country'. Replace with 'views in other countries' and 'each country' to convey meaning. Suggestions: choose correct noun ('views' not 'viewers') and use 'each' to indicate individual countries.

× So therefore there's a very good way to remember the things that happened while traveling.

✓ Therefore, taking pictures is a very good way to remember the things that happen while traveling.

Using both 'So' and 'therefore' is redundant; choose one. 'There's a very good way' is vague; specify 'taking pictures is a very good way'. Also keep tense consistent: use 'happen' or 'happened' depending on intended generality; present simple 'happen' fits general statements. Suggestions: avoid redundant connectors and make the subject explicit.