Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect reasons and provide a specific, complete example with correct tense and clear ending. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I can share them with my family and preserve memories. For example, last year when I visited Appa I took many photos of the coastline and shared them with my relatives, and now every time I look at those pictures I can clearly recall the pleasant breeze and the sunset.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, also). Correct noun forms and use more precise descriptions instead of vague words. Keep within 3 sentences.

Example: I prefer rural areas because they offer peaceful natural scenery and fresher air. For example, when I visited Upper last year, the rolling hills and clear skies made the trip very relaxing, and the weather was pleasantly cool.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words (because, so) to explain reasons concisely and include one specific supporting detail or brief example. Fix redundant sentences and fillers like 'uh'.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because they are accessible and cost less to visit. For instance, I can reach several lovely countryside spots within a short drive, so I often go there on weekends instead of travelling abroad.

× Yes I do for two reasons the first reason to share them with my family and the second reason to remember where I went.

✓ Yes, I do for two reasons. The first reason is to share them with my family, and the second reason is to remember where I went.

Missing linking verbs 'is' make the clauses fragments; commas and conjunctions are needed to join ideas. Use 'is' after 'reason' to form complete sentences and add punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: add 'is' after 'reason' and use commas/and to join clauses.

× For example, last year when I went to Appa, I talk a lot of pictures and share them with my family and friends and now whenever I see them I can recall a beautiful.

✓ For example, last year when I went to Appa, I took a lot of pictures and shared them with my family and friends, and now whenever I see them I can recall something beautiful.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs 'talk' and 'share' with past-time context 'last year'. Use past tense verbs 'took' and 'shared'. Also 'a beautiful' is incomplete; use 'something beautiful' or 'a beautiful moment'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and complete the noun phrase.

× For example, last year when I went to Appa, I talk a lot of pictures and share them with my family and friends and now whenever I see them I can recall a beautiful.

✓ For example, last year when I went to Appa, I took a lot of pictures and shared them with my family and friends, and now whenever I see them I can recall a beautiful moment.

The adjective 'beautiful' cannot stand alone without a noun; 'a beautiful' is ungrammatical. Add a noun like 'moment' or 'scene' to complete the phrase. Suggestion: follow adjectives with an appropriate noun.

× I think I prefer countryside and rural areas because it has beautiful natural scenery and nice weather.

✓ I think I prefer the countryside and rural areas because they have beautiful natural scenery and nice weather.

Mismatch between plural subject 'countryside and rural areas' and singular pronoun 'it'. Use plural pronoun 'they' and verb 'have'. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'countryside' for natural usage. Suggestion: match pronoun and verb number to the subject and include 'the' with 'countryside'.

× For example, last year when I went to Upper it had a beautiful countryside and the weather was amazing.

✓ For example, last year when I went to Upper, it had beautiful countryside and the weather was amazing.

Use 'beautiful countryside' without the article 'a' because 'countryside' is an uncountable noun here. The rest is correctly in past tense. Suggestion: remove the article before 'countryside' when treating it as an area/uncountable noun.

× I prefer views in my own country for a reason.

✓ I prefer views in my own country for one reason.

The phrase 'for a reason' is vague and non-idiomatic here; 'for one reason' or 'for a single reason' is clearer. This is a word-choice issue rather than modal, but listed under modal verb usage is not ideal; still correct wording improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'for one reason'.

× The reason is that if I wanted to enjoy the atmosphere of the countryside, I do not need to spend much money or travel far to do that.

✓ The reason is that if I want to enjoy the atmosphere of the countryside, I do not need to spend much money or travel far to do that.

The conditional 'if I wanted' implies unreal/past; here the speaker means a general present truth, so use present 'if I want'. Keep 'do not need' in present to match. Suggestion: use simple present in 'if' clauses for general truths.

× We here have a beautiful place.

✓ We have a beautiful place here.

Word order is awkward. Place adverbial 'here' after the object or at sentence end. 'We here have' is uncommon in spoken/written English. Suggestion: move 'here' to the end of the clause: 'We have a beautiful place here.'

× Uh, also, we here have a beautiful place.

✓ Also, we have a beautiful place here.

Same issue as previous: awkward placement of 'here'. Remove filler 'Uh' and place 'here' at the end for natural word order. Suggestion: omit filler and reposition 'here'.