Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a direct reason and one or two specific details, but avoid repeated fillers such as “like” and unnecessary phrases such as “the view of the outside.” Use natural expressions such as “look out of the window,” “watch the scenery,” and “between cities.” Organize the answer with a clear linking word, such as “because” or “also,” and avoid confusing wording like “you cannot you can see.”

Example: Yes, I do, because I enjoy looking out of the window and watching the scenery go by. For example, when I travel between large cities, I can see beautiful countryside that I would not normally see. It makes the journey more interesting and relaxing.

Suggestion: Answer more confidently and state the journey clearly at the beginning. Correct the natural expressions: say “we lived in the US,” “travelled around the US,” “went on a road trip,” and “it was my first time”; “Frida” should be “Florida.” Add a logical sequence with linking words such as “for example” and “as a result,” and explain one specific memorable detail instead of repeating “like” and “nice.”

Example: Yes, we did. When I was a child, my family lived in the US, and we took a long road trip around the country. For example, we drove to Florida to visit Disneyland, which was my first time seeing it. I remember being very excited because the journey gave us a chance to spend quality time together.

× Since then you can see the view of the outside.

✓ Because you can see the view outside.

Since then refers to a period beginning at a particular time in the past, so it does not express the intended reason here. Use because to introduce a reason. Also, view outside is the more natural expression.

× Sometimes it is so surprising that you cannot you can see the countryside when you travel between big cities.

✓ Sometimes, it is surprising to see the countryside when you travel between big cities.

The original sentence contains the repeated and contradictory forms cannot and can. The structure it is surprising to see is clearer and grammatically complete.

× It is very different from the station around.

✓ It is very different from the stations in the area.

The sentence refers to more than one station, so station must be pluralized as stations. In the area is also the natural phrase for describing nearby places.

× Once, we lived in US and traveled around US.

✓ Once, we lived in the US and traveled around the US.

US is normally used with the definite article: the US. This article is required both before lived in the US and traveled around the US.

× We traveled around the US since it was a nice opportunity for me to go off-road.

✓ We traveled around the US because it was a nice opportunity for me to go off-road.

Since can express time or a reason, but because is clearer and more natural when explaining why you traveled. Use because to introduce the reason for an action.

× It was for first time.

✓ It was the first time.

First time is a specific, singular expression, so it requires the definite article the. The correct phrase is the first time.