Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly with a natural sentence, and avoid repeating phrases such as “I do prefer” and “around the window.” Use “by the window” rather than “around a window.” Also, complete the final idea clearly: a window allows you to enjoy the view and get natural light, although it does not usually provide fresh air on a plane or train. Add one specific reason or example and connect your ideas with “because” or “also.”

Example: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I can enjoy the scenery along the way. It also gives me more natural light, which makes the journey feel more pleasant.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear answer, such as “Yes, I did,” and then describe the journey using the past tense consistently. Avoid repeated and incomplete phrases like “whenever I walk” and “which had a great,” and use “my parents” instead of “my father and mother” for more natural expression. Explain why the trip was memorable by adding specific details about the temple, the journey, or how you felt. Use linking words such as “because” and “although” to make the response more coherent.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents took me on a long journey to visit Manakamana Temple. It was memorable because the trip took several hours, and I enjoyed spending time with my family and seeing the beautiful scenery along the way.

× Yes, I do prefer I do prefer to travel by sitting around a wind around the window as a window helps us to see lots of things nearby and also it helps us to provide fresh air from the.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it helps me see things nearby and gives me fresh air.

The original sentence contains repeated words and several incomplete or incorrectly connected phrases. Use a complete sentence after Yes, and connect the reason with because. Also, use a clear structure: prefer to sit by the window.

× I prefer to travel by sitting around a wind around the window.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I travel.

The correct preposition is by the window, not around the window. We also say sit by the window rather than travel by sitting around a window in this context.

× A window helps us to see lots of things nearby.

✓ The window helps me see things nearby.

The speaker is referring to a specific window, the one next to the seat, so the definite article the is more appropriate than the indefinite article a.

× A window helps us to see lots of things nearby and also it helps us to provide fresh air.

✓ The window helps me see things nearby and gives me fresh air.

The question asks about the student's personal preference, so the pronoun me is more suitable than us. The sentence is also more natural when the subject is not repeated before the second verb.

× Also it helps us to provide fresh air from the.

✓ It also gives me fresh air.

The original phrase from the is incomplete because it does not identify where the air comes from. The revised sentence is complete and expresses the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, whenever I walk, whenever, when I was small, my my father and mother took me to a small visit to Manakamana Temple.

✓ Yes, when I was young, my father and mother took me on a short trip to Manakamana Temple.

Whenever is unnecessary because the speaker is describing one past journey, not a repeated action. Use the conjunction when to introduce the time of the journey.

× Whenever I walk, whenever, when I was small, my my father and mother took me to a small visit to Manakamana Temple.

✓ When I was young, my father and mother took me on a short trip to Manakamana Temple.

The question asks about a past experience. Walk is in the present tense and does not fit this context. Use the past-time expression when I was young and the past-tense verb took.

× My father and mother took me to a small visit to Manakamana Temple.

✓ My father and mother took me on a short trip to Manakamana Temple.

The natural preposition with trip is on: take someone on a trip. The phrase take someone to a visit is not natural in this context.

× Which has a great memory, which had a great, which I had great memory with.

✓ It was a very memorable trip for me.

The original ending contains several incomplete relative clauses and does not form a complete grammatical sentence. Use a complete sentence such as It was a very memorable trip for me to express the idea clearly.