Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a clear reason and use linking words to connect your ideas. The phrase “mountain night beaches” is unclear; say “mountains and beaches” instead. Also, use punctuation after “scenery,” and avoid repeating “beautiful” too often. You could add one specific benefit of a window seat, such as being able to take photos or watch the landscape.

Example: Yes, I do. I usually prefer a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery during a journey. For example, I can take photos of mountains, beaches, and small towns along the way. It also makes long trips feel more interesting and relaxing.

Suggestion: Answer directly in the past tense and avoid repeating the idea in the first sentence. Use “there was beautiful ocean scenery and many green hills” or “there were beautiful beaches and green hills” instead of “plenty of beautiful ocean and green hill.” Since you are describing a childhood experience, use “it was very exciting,” not “it is very exciting.” Add a specific detail about what you did or how long the journey took.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often took me on long road trips to southern Thailand. The journey took several hours, but I enjoyed seeing the beautiful beaches and green hills along the way. We usually stopped at local restaurants, so the trips were exciting and memorable.

× This is because I love to look out of the window to see beautiful scenery for example beautiful mountain night beaches so I think it's very exciting.

✓ This is because I love to look out of the window to see beautiful scenery, such as beautiful mountains and beaches. Therefore, I think it is very exciting.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined together without appropriate punctuation or clear sentence boundaries. Use a comma before such as and separate the final idea into a new sentence. This makes the sentence easier to understand and avoids a run-on sentence.

× My parents often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there are plenty of beautiful ocean and green hill, so I think it's very exciting.

✓ My parents often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there is plenty of beautiful ocean scenery and many green hills, so I think it is very exciting.

Ocean scenery is an uncountable noun phrase, so it does not need a plural form. Hill is a countable noun, and the sentence refers to more than one hill, so it should be plural: green hills. Use many with plural countable nouns such as hills.

× My parents often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there are plenty of beautiful ocean and green hill, so I think it's very exciting.

✓ My parents often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there is plenty of beautiful ocean scenery and many green hills, so I think it is very exciting.

The phrase ocean scenery is uncountable, so it takes there is, not there are. When using there is or there are, choose the form that agrees with the noun phrase that follows. Use there is with uncountable nouns and there are with plural countable nouns.