Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors. Correct minor grammar and word choice (e.g., ‘scenery’ not ‘sceneries’; ‘when I need to go to the toilet’). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I prefer a window seat. I enjoy watching the passing scenery because it relaxes me and makes long journeys more interesting. However, it can be inconvenient when I need to use the restroom, so I usually choose an aisle seat if I think I’ll need to move around.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and add specific details (when, age, what you enjoyed). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid short fragmented phrases. Fix verb tenses and articles (e.g., ‘when I was in primary school’, ‘they took me to Beijing’, ‘it took around a week’, ‘we tried local dishes’).

Example: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school, my parents took me to Beijing for about a week. We visited the Great Wall and Tiananmen Square, and I remember trying local dishes such as Peking duck, which I really enjoyed because the flavors were so different from home.

× I prefer to see the window seats that I, I can enjoy the natural sceneries.

✓ I prefer the window seat because I can enjoy the natural scenery.

Original sentence uses 'see the window seats that I can enjoy' which is awkward and contains redundancy ('I, I'). Use of plural 'sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. Simplify structure: 'I prefer the window seat because I can enjoy the natural scenery.' This corrects noun number and clarifies the clause connecting preference and reason.

× I think As for me, it's a very great way to release my stress, although sometimes it's it's a little bit inconvenient if I'm going to go to the toilet, but I still like the window seats.

✓ I think, for me, it's a great way to relieve my stress, although sometimes it's a little inconvenient if I need to go to the toilet, but I still like window seats.

Multiple issues: 'As for me' and 'I think' are redundant; choose one or connect with commas. 'Very great' is unnatural—use 'great' or 'very good.' 'Release my stress' should be 'relieve my stress.' Double 'it's it's' is repetition. 'Going to go to the toilet' is wordy; use 'need to go to the toilet.' 'Window seats' plural is acceptable but keep consistent. The correction refines word choice, removes redundancy, and fixes repetitions.

× When I was in the primary school, my parents took me to the Beijing and they takes around a week.

✓ When I was in primary school, my parents took me to Beijing and it took around a week.

Errors: 'in the primary school' should be 'in primary school' (article unnecessary). 'to the Beijing' incorrectly uses the definite article with place name; use 'to Beijing.' 'they takes' is wrong subject and tense—should be 'it took' referring to the trip's duration in past tense. The correction fixes article use, place name, and verb tense/agreement.

× We visited the Great Wall and we also in some local cuisines like Beijing duck.

✓ We visited the Great Wall and also tried some local dishes like Peking duck.

Original 'we also in some local cuisines' is ungrammatical: missing verb and wrong preposition. Use 'tried' as the verb for experiencing food and 'local dishes' instead of 'local cuisines.' Also 'Beijing duck' is more commonly called 'Peking duck' in English. The correction supplies the missing verb, corrects noun choice, and improves natural phrasing.