Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cevabınızı daha net ve tutarlı hale getirmek için cümlelerinizi kısaltın, dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin ve bağlantı ifadeleri kullanarak sebep-sonuç ilişkisini daha açık kurun. Örneğin, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ("kind of", "a little more different", "both ways") ve tekil/çoğul uyumuna dikkat edin ("cars makes" → "cars make"). Ayrıca 2–3 cümleyi aşmayan, doğrudan bir konu cümlesi ve bir destekleyici neden verin.

Example: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. On a plane I enjoy the view and the sense of space, but in a car I avoid the back seat because I often feel dizzy and nauseous, so I usually choose a front window seat instead.

Suggestion: Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğru zaman kullanımıyla yeniden düzenleyin; dolgu sözcüklerini ("umm", "actually") azaltın. Başlangıçta net bir konu cümlesi verin, ardından yolculuğun uzunluğunu, zorlukları ve olumlu yönlerini bağlantı ifadeleriyle belirtin. Örneğin, "however" veya "despite" gibi bağlaçlar kullanarak zıtlığı vurgulayın ve sayısal ayrıntılar verin ("two days").

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child my family drove from France to Turkey, which took about two days. My father drove first but he became very tired, so my mother drove for a while; however she also got exhausted, so we had to stop several times. Despite that, it was a fun trip because we spent a lot of time together and saw interesting places along the way.

× Yes, I do actually prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling but it's kind of depends if it's on a plane or in a car because cars makes me dizzy and I want to throw up when I'm on the back seat of a car.

✓ Yes, I actually prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling, but it kind of depends on whether it's on a plane or in a car, because cars make me dizzy and I want to throw up when I'm in the back seat of a car.

The verb must agree with the plural subject: 'cars make' not 'cars makes'. Also 'depends on' is the correct prepositional verb and 'on the back seat' should be 'in the back seat'. Use 'whether' to introduce the two options. Improve punctuation and word order for clarity.

× But plane is a little more different so both ways I do kind of like it.

✓ But a plane is a little different, so in both cases I kind of like it.

Use the article 'a' before singular countable noun: 'a plane'. 'More different' is odd; use 'different' or 'a little different'. 'Both ways' is better expressed as 'in both cases'. Adjust word order for natural English.

× Yes, actually we went to Turkey from France.

✓ Yes, actually we went to Turkey from France.

Sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed. (No error to correct.)

× That was about umm, 2 days worth of driving.

✓ That was about two days' worth of driving.

Use words for small numbers in writing and use the possessive construction 'two days' worth' with an apostrophe to show the amount. Also remove filler 'umm' in formal responses.

× My dad was so tired my mom took over but she got so tired too so we had to stop a few times.

✓ My dad was so tired that my mom took over, but she became tired too, so we had to stop a few times.

Add 'that' after 'so tired' for clarity in result clauses. Use consistent verb choice ('became' instead of 'got') and add commas to separate clauses for readability.

× But other than that it was very fun actually.

✓ Other than that, it was actually very fun.

Move 'actually' to a more natural position and add a comma after the introductory phrase 'Other than that' for correct sentence flow and emphasis.