Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and articles, and keep it concise. Add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector (for example, because/so). Avoid redundancy like “good experience.”

Example: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy the views during the journey. For example, last year I sat by the window when I flew to Taiwan, and seeing the islands from the plane made my first solo trip abroad much more memorable.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence and then one or two clear supporting details. Use correct vocabulary (journey/trip/short trips) and simplify grammar. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect idea and give specific durations and destinations.

Example: No, I did not have long journeys with my family when I was a child because we usually took short trips. For example, we often visited nearby provinces for two days and one night or three days and two nights, so we never traveled far from home.

× Yes, I prefer sitting by the window because I can see the view and the good experience.

✓ Yes, I prefer sitting by the window because I can see the view and have a good experience.

The original sentence uses 'the good experience' which is unnatural and mixes noun phrases. Use 'have a good experience' to express experiencing something. Also keep 'sitting' after 'prefer' which is correct.

× For example last year I sitting by the window, go to Taiwan it' is first time for me to go abroad for solo travel trip.

✓ For example, last year I sat by the window when I went to Taiwan; it was my first time traveling abroad alone.

Multiple tense errors and word forms: 'I sitting' should be past tense 'I sat'; 'go to Taiwan' should be past 'went to Taiwan'; 'it' is missing verb and punctuation—use 'it was'. 'Solo travel trip' is redundant; use 'traveling abroad alone' or 'a solo trip'. Ensure consistent past tense for a past event and natural phrasing.

× No because I have this little trip or not long short journal with the trip at a show is for example it's like we go to another provinces two two days one night or three days two nights.

✓ No, because we only had short trips when I was a child; for example, we went to nearby provinces for two days and one night or three days and two nights.

The student mixes present and past tenses and uses awkward nouns. For childhood experiences use past tense: 'we had' or 'we went'. 'Little trip' and 'not long short journal' are incorrect; use 'short trips'. Use plural agreement 'provinces' is fine but say 'nearby provinces'. Maintain past tense throughout.

× That's it's near my home.

✓ They were near my home.

The original 'That's it's' is ungrammatical and unclear. If referring to the trips or provinces, use plural pronoun 'they' and past tense 'were' to match earlier corrected sentence. Ensure pronoun agrees with the noun it replaces.