Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조와 문법을 정리하고 불필요한 중복을 줄이세요. 답변 첫 문장은 직접적으로 질문에 답한 뒤, 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 예를 들어 관사(a/the) 사용, 동사 시제 및 주어-동사 일치에 주의하고, 말더듬(uh)이나 반복을 줄이세요. 또한 구체적인 예시(예: 풍경, 구경하고 싶은 장면)를 추가하면 점수가 오릅니다.

Example: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I like looking out because I enjoy seeing new places and watching the scenery change. For example, on train journeys I often watch the mountains and small towns pass by, which makes the trip more interesting.

Suggestion: 시제와 문장 구성을 정확하게 사용하세요. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 일관되게 유지하고, 불필요한 반복을 피하세요. 또한 여행 기간이나 활동에 대한 구체적인 세부사항(예: 방문한 장소, 느낀 점)을 덧붙이면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다.

Example: Yes, I remember a long family trip to Hong Kong when I was about ten. We stayed there for two weeks and visited places like Ocean Park and the Peak. I enjoyed trying new foods and spending time with my relatives, so it was a memorable experience.

× I prefer to stay by window because I'm traveling.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window because I'm traveling.

The phrase 'stay by window' is unnatural; after 'prefer' we commonly use 'sit by the window' when referring to a seat. Use the definite article 'the' before 'window' because a specific window (on the vehicle) is implied. Replace 'stay' with 'sit' to match the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to sit by the window' for natural speech.

× It means, uh, during the traveling I always want to see new things and I just want to look around where I'm going, that's why.

✓ It means that during travel I always want to see new things and look around while I'm going there.

Avoid 'the traveling'—use the uncountable noun 'travel' for the general activity. Use consistent present simple/present continuous: 'I always want' (present simple) pairs with 'look around' (base verb), and 'while I'm going there' uses present continuous for movement. Also remove filler 'uh' and reduce redundancy ('I just want to'). Suggestion: Say 'during travel I always want to see new things and look around while I'm going there.'

× Yeah, I still still remember we have we have traveled to Hong Kong when I was a child, like 10 years old.

✓ Yes, I still remember we traveled to Hong Kong when I was a child, when I was about 10 years old.

Use simple past 'traveled' for a completed action at a specific time in the past. 'We have traveled' (present perfect) is incorrect with a specified past time ('when I was a child'). Remove duplicate words 'still still' and duplicate 'we have'. Add 'about' to soften '10 years old'. Suggestion: Use 'we traveled to Hong Kong when I was about 10 years old.'

× I was a two week trip with my whole family.

✓ It was a two-week trip with my whole family.

The sentence lacks a proper subject and article. Use 'It was' to refer to the trip. Compound adjective 'two-week' requires hyphenation when modifying 'trip'. Use 'a' before 'two-week trip'. Suggestion: Say 'It was a two-week trip with my whole family.'