Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I prefer the window seat.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Correct grammar (verb forms, word order) and avoid redundant phrases. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

Example: Yes, I prefer the window seat when I travel because I enjoy the view and it feels more private. For example, when I was a child my brother and I always fought over the windows while our youngest sibling ended up in the middle seat. It was funny but I still choose the window whenever I can.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and then add specific, connected details. Use linking words to join ideas (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “so”). Avoid short choppy sentences by combining related information. Also correct minor phrasing (use ‘a fourteen-hour ride’).

Example: Yes, we had one long family journey when I was a child. We traveled to Wohran, a city with beautiful scenery, and the trip took about a fourteen-hour ride, so it was quite tiring. For example, we went with several cousins and spent the evenings talking and enjoying the view, which made the trip very memorable.

× Yes, I do prefer sitting by the window and travel in.

✓ Yes, I do prefer sitting by the window and traveling in.

The sentence coordinates two verbs after 'prefer': 'sitting' and 'travel'. When using 'prefer' with two coordinated actions, they should have the same form. Here 'sitting' is a gerund (-ing form), so 'travel' should be in the -ing form as 'traveling'. Consistent verb forms improve fluency. Also, use American spelling 'traveling' or British 'travelling' consistently. Suggestion: keep both verbs as gerunds when linked by 'and'.

× When we were young, we set our seats in the car with my siblings so we are three me and my second brother always had window seats, but my younger brother always ends up in the middle.

✓ When we were young, my siblings and I chose our seats in the car so the three of us — me, my second brother, and my younger brother — always had window seats, but my youngest brother always ended up in the middle.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order and unclear subject reference. 'We set our seats in the car with my siblings' is awkward; 'my siblings and I chose our seats' is clearer. 'so we are three me and my second brother always had' is ungrammatical; use 'the three of us' to refer to three people and list them correctly. Tense consistency: the clause describes past events, so use past tense 'had' and 'ended up' (not 'ends up'). Also 'younger brother' vs 'youngest' depending on meaning; here 'youngest' fits if he is the youngest. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use clear subject phrases like 'the three of us'.

× We did once yes.

✓ We did once, yes.

This short answer is acceptable but punctuation improves clarity. It uses 'did' to emphasize past occurrence, which is fine. Suggestion: add a comma for natural speech pause: 'We did once, yes.'

× We went to Wohran.

✓ We went to Wohran.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable as a simple past statement. No change needed unless the place name is misspelled; keep as provided. No structural correction required.

× It's a place that has a beautiful view and beautiful city.

✓ It's a place with a beautiful view and a beautiful city.

The original repeats 'beautiful' awkwardly and uses 'that has' which is wordy. Use 'with' to link the place to its features and include the article 'a' before 'beautiful city'. Suggestion: streamline by saying 'It's a place with a beautiful view and a beautiful city' or better 'It's a place with a beautiful view and a lovely city.'

× It was a fourteen hours ride.

✓ It was a fourteen-hour ride.

When using a compound adjective before a noun, use the singular form of the time unit and hyphenate: 'fourteen-hour ride' (not 'fourteen hours ride'). Suggestion: use hyphenated compound adjectives for duration modifiers before nouns.

× We went with other cousins.

✓ We went with our other cousins.

'Other cousins' is ambiguous; adding the possessive pronoun 'our' clarifies that these cousins are related to the speaker. Suggestion: use possessive pronouns when referring to family members to show relationship clearly.