Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “clearly and concisely” is repetitive) and fix grammar errors (e.g., “I left rest my chin” → “I often rest my chin”). Use vivid but accurate vocabulary (e.g., “hair” not “hairs”). Keep it to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat because I enjoy watching the landscape change as we travel. For example, on train trips I like to rest my chin on the pane and feel the breeze, which brings back happy memories of family journeys. Because the view keeps me relaxed, I often choose the window whenever possible.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence then provide specific, coherent details with correct verb tenses and linking words. Fix awkward phrasing (e.g., “he has to go” → “he had to move”; “within the duration of two and three years” → “every two or three years”; “transported to new state” → “transferred to a new posting”). Limit to 2–4 sentences and include one clear example or result.

Example: Yes, we traveled a lot when I was a child because my father was an army officer. He was transferred to a new posting every two or three years, so we moved with him and I got to visit many regions of the country. As a result, I have fond memories of long car and train journeys with my family.

× By sitting on the window seat, I can have the opportunity to see the scenery passing by more clearly and concisely.

✓ Sitting in the window seat gives me the opportunity to see the scenery passing by more clearly and vividly.

The original begins with 'By sitting...' which is grammatically acceptable but wordy; 'in the window seat' is a more natural preposition (use ID 11 and 8 together but following instructions only correct items listed — choose 8: verb + -ing). Replace 'concisely' (wrong adverb choice) with 'vividly' to convey clarity of sight. Use 'gives me the opportunity' rather than 'I can have the opportunity' for conciseness and naturalness.

× Moreover, I left rest my chin on window pane and love the wind play with my hairs because it reminds me lots of the memories I had made during my traveling days.

✓ Moreover, I used to rest my chin on the window pane and loved the wind playing with my hair because it reminded me of many memories from my travelling days.

Multiple problems: word order and verb forms were incorrect. 'Left rest my chin' is not correct; use 'used to rest my chin' to express habitual past action (ID 5 Past tense issue also applies, but primary is preposition and verb order -> ID 11). 'On the window pane' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Play with my hairs' should be 'playing with my hair' (hair is uncountable here). 'Reminds me lots of the memories I had made' should be past tense consistent: 'reminded me of many memories' and use 'from my travelling days' for clearer expression.

× Yes, very frequently. I think so because my father was an army officer and he has to go to another state within the duration of two and three years.

✓ Yes, very frequently. I think so because my father was an army officer and he had to go to another state every two or three years.

Tense inconsistency: 'was an army officer' (past) should match 'had to go' (past obligation). 'He has to go' is present and incorrect. 'Within the duration of two and three years' is awkward; use 'every two or three years' for natural expression.

× Whenever he transported to new state, we were always with him and I think I have been to every state of my country.

✓ Whenever he was transferred to a new state, we were always with him, and I think I have been to every state in my country.

'Transported to new state' is incorrect collocation; use 'was transferred to a new state' (passive meaning). Also need the article 'a new state'. 'Every state of my country' is better expressed as 'every state in my country' (preposition choice). Note tense: 'we were always with him' is fine; 'I think I have been' is present perfect reflecting life experience, which is acceptable.