Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và dùng liên kết rõ ràng. Tránh câu quá dài, lặp ý và sử dụng từ không chính xác (ví dụ “even that”, “pictures” thay vì “view”, “trip to hide”). Thực hiện câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi cung cấp 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể, dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “for example”. Nên giữ dưới 4-5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh (view, scenery, food stalls, memorable).

Example: Yes, I prefer a window seat because I enjoy the view. For example, on a recent trip I spent hours watching the coastline and local food stalls pass by, which made the journey more exciting.

Suggestion: Cần làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và cụm từ không tự nhiên (ví dụ “highlight of highlights”, “sunny pictures”). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (hoạt động ngoài trời, cảm xúc, kỷ niệm), dùng liên từ như “because”, “for example”, hoặc “we used to”. Giữ số câu trong khoảng 2-4 và dùng từ vựng chính xác (memorable, beaches, picnics, family time).

Example: Yes, we often had long trips to the coast when I was a child. Those holidays were very relaxing because we spent lots of time together doing outdoor activities like swimming and picnicking, which created many memorable family moments.

× Yes, I always opt for a window seat even that it allows me to soak up the pictures, scenery go by and keep my excitement high.

✓ Yes, I always opt for a window seat because it allows me to soak up the scenery as it goes by and keeps my excitement high.

The phrase 'even that' is incorrect; use a conjunction like 'because' to show reason. 'scenery go by' has subject-verb agreement and word choice issues; use 'scenery as it goes by'. 'keep my excitement high' must agree with the singular subject 'it', so use 'keeps'. Suggestion: use clear conjunctions (because, since, as) and ensure subject-verb agreement with singular subjects.

× An example was my trip to hide from last week where I spent hours feasting my eyes on all the food stalls along.

✓ For example, last week I took a trip to Hyde Farm where I spent hours feasting my eyes on all the food stalls along the way.

The original sentence has unclear structure and possible word error 'hide from'. Reorder to 'For example, last week I took a trip to X' and use 'where' to introduce the clause. Add a clearer ending 'along the way' or specify location. Suggestion: place time expressions (last week) near the verb and clarify place names; use 'feasting my eyes on' followed by a clear object.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family often took long trips to the coast and those holidays were very relaxing and became one of the highlight of highlights of my childhood because we spent lots of time together with outdoor activities and still remember the sunny pictures and the golden sun.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family often took long trips to the coast; those holidays were very relaxing and became one of the highlights of my childhood because we spent a lot of time together doing outdoor activities and still remembered the sunny days and the golden sun.

Several tense and agreement issues: 'became one of the highlight of highlights' is ungrammatical—use 'one of the highlights'. 'lots of time' is informal but acceptable; 'a lot of time' is preferred. 'with outdoor activities' should be 'doing outdoor activities'. 'still remember' should match past reference, so 'still remembered' fits narrative past. 'sunny pictures' is incorrect collocation—use 'sunny days'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when recounting past experiences, correct plural forms, and choose natural collocations.