Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và ý chính rõ ràng, nhưng vẫn có một vài lỗi ngữ pháp (thì, số ít/đa số), lặp từ và câu hơi dài. Nên sửa lỗi như “when I when we fly out” và “fly over mountain”, thay bằng cấu trúc ngắn gọn, sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý (for example, and, so) và bổ sung một vài chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu tự nhiên hơn. Đồng thời giữ không quá 4-5 câu.

Example: I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy the scenery and find it relaxing. For example, on flights over mountain ranges I can take photos of the landscape. Also, having a window feels more private and lets me rest without being disturbed.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng chứa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng (thì, chủ ngữ-động từ, mạo từ), phát âm/nhầm từ (“girls”, “chip trips”, “pond”) gây hiểu nhầm. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng ở thì quá khứ (e.g. I often had long journeys...), sửa các động từ và danh từ, dùng từ vựng chính xác và thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể (điểm đến, hoạt động) để minh hoạ. Giữ câu ngắn, mạch lạc và dùng liên từ nếu cần.

Example: Yes, I often went on long journeys with my family when I was a child, especially during summer holidays. We usually drove to the coast and spent hours singing and playing games in the car. Those trips were a special time for us to bond and make lasting memories.

× I also like sitting by the window because I can take photos, especially when I when we fly out or fly over mountain.

✓ I also like sitting by the window because I can take photos, especially when we fly out or fly over mountains.

The error is a missing plural noun 'mountains' after 'over' and an extra word 'when' causing redundancy. Use plural 'mountains' to match general reference to mountain ranges. Remove the extra 'when' to avoid ungrammatical repetition. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch duplicated words and ensure nouns that refer to general places are plural when appropriate.

× Uh, girls, I often have long journeys with my family when I were child, especially during the summer holidays.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, I often had long journeys with my family, especially during the summer holidays.

'When I were child' mixes incorrect verb form and missing article. Use past tense 'was' for the first-person singular and include the article 'a' before 'child'. Also reorder 'girls' (which seems out of place) or remove it; here it was removed to make the sentence natural. Suggestion: use 'was a child' and keep past-tense verbs consistent.

× We spend a more time, spend a lot of time together on those chip trips and it was a great way to pond and make memories.

✓ We spent a lot more time together on those cheap trips, and it was a great way to bond and make memories.

Multiple errors: 'spend' should be past tense 'spent' to match 'were a child' and 'we often had'; 'a more time' is incorrect order and article usage — use 'a lot more time' or 'much more time'; 'chip' is a misspelling of 'cheap'; 'pond' is a typo for 'bond'. Correct punctuation and conjunction use improves clarity. Suggestion: ensure verb tenses are consistent (use past for past events), check collocations ('a lot of time'/'a lot more time'), and proofread for typos that change meaning.