Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm, dùng câu ngắn gọn hơn và cấu trúc rõ ràng. Ví dụ: Sử dụng thì phù hợp (when I travel), động từ đúng dạng (looking → look), và tránh lặp từ/ý thừa. Thêm một câu hỗ trợ ngắn với liên từ để làm rõ lý do (because/so) sẽ giúp ý mạch lạc hơn.

Example: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the beautiful landscapes. For example, on train journeys I often watch the countryside change, which makes the trip more relaxing.

Suggestion: Sửa ngữ pháp và rõ ràng hơn; tránh tiếng lấp lửng (uh) và sửa lỗi từ vựng (same → sand). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (thời gian, hoạt động). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Example: No, I didn't have any very long trips as a child; most family holidays lasted two or three days. We often went to the beach in Vietnam, where I loved playing in the sand and sitting by the shore to watch the waves.

× Yes, of course, when I traveling I really like to looking out of the window to see the beautiful landscape and the breathtaking atmosphere.

✓ Yes, of course, when I am traveling I really like to look out of the window to see the beautiful landscape and the breathtaking atmosphere.

Two issues: missing auxiliary 'am' for the present continuous and incorrect use of the -ing form after 'like'. 'When I traveling' should be 'when I am traveling' to form the present continuous (Grammar Problem Type 10). After 'like' we use the base form of the verb for a general preference: 'like to look' or 'like looking'. Suggestion: use 'am traveling' and 'like to look' or 'like looking' for natural phrasing.

× Not really a long journey, but it's, that is a short trip, uh, between two to three days when I was a child.

✓ Not really a long journey, but it was a short trip of two to three days when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present 'it's/that is' with the past context 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'it was' to match the time frame (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also simplify redundant phrases 'it's, that is' and use 'of two to three days' for natural expression. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and remove fillers.

× This is a trip to the beach in Vietnam that I really enjoy playing with the same and sitting on the beach.

✓ It was a trip to the beach in Vietnam where I really enjoyed playing in the sand and sitting on the beach.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'This is' should be past 'It was' to match past timeframe (also past tense issue but main problem here is pronoun/time reference). 'Playing with the same' is incorrect; likely meant 'playing in the sand'. Use 'where' to refer to the place and 'enjoyed' for past enjoyment (Grammar Problem Type 12). Suggestion: use 'It was' or 'That was', replace 'same' with 'sand', and use 'where' to connect place with action.