Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and incorrect word choices (e.g., carry → car, training → passing). Also correct verb forms and agreement (enjoy → enjoyS, make → makes).

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I find the passing scenery relaxing. For example, I like watching trees and city streets go by, and I often listen to music at the same time, which makes the trip feel shorter and less stressful.

Suggestion: Provide a clear direct answer, then give specific conditions when you take photos. Use correct tenses and concise linking words (for example, 'when' or 'especially when'). Avoid vague or garbled phrases and repeat words. Mention specific subjects you photograph and why the light is good.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially when I travel on long journeys. For example, I like capturing modern buildings and dramatic skies because changing light during sunrise or sunset creates interesting colors and contrasts.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference sentence, then support it with two specific reasons linked with connectors (because, for example). Correct collocations (prefer the mountains, mountain living), grammar (I prefer the mountains; I would love hiking → I would love to go hiking) and avoid repetition. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy peaceful, cool places and fresh air. For example, mountain walks help me relax and I love going hiking on quiet trails. Also, living near mountains feels more natural and removes me from the noise of the city.

× Yes, definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct. (No change required.)

× I would love to look at the window when I travel by bus and carry because I'm really enjoy watching the training scenery and it really helps me to relax and, uh, get the stress out of my mind.

✓ I love looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I really enjoy watching the passing scenery and it helps me relax and get the stress out of my mind.

Present tense and verb form issues: 'would love to look at the window' is odd for habitual action, so use simple present 'I love looking out of the window'. 'carry' is incorrect word choice for 'car'. 'I'm really enjoy' mixes auxiliary 'am' with base verb 'enjoy' instead of the gerund/infinitive form; use 'I really enjoy'. 'training scenery' is likely a wrong word; use 'passing scenery'. Removed filler 'uh' and adjusted word order for fluency. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, use 'looking out of' for window, and choose correct nouns ('car', 'passing').

× I often listen to music at the same time, which make the journey much.

✓ I often listen to music at the same time, which makes the journey much more enjoyable.

Adverb placement and subject-verb agreement: 'which make' should be 'which makes' because the relative pronoun refers to the singular gerund phrase 'listening to music' or the whole action, requiring singular verb. 'much' is incomplete; add an adjective like 'more enjoyable'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with its subject and complete comparative phrases (much more + adjective).

× Yes of course I enjoy looking out if there were no one in most travelling, so I often take photos of the passing scenery, especially some modern instances.

✓ Yes, of course I enjoy looking out when I travel alone, so I often take photos of the passing scenery, especially of interesting modern buildings.

Multiple errors: 'if there were no one in most travelling' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'when I travel alone' (subject-verb and structure). 'instances' is wrong noun choice; use 'buildings' or 'structures'. Corrected sentence uses proper clause for habitual action and clearer nouns. Suggestion: use 'when I travel alone' for travelling without companions and choose appropriate nouns ('buildings', 'scenery').

× I usually take pictures on the long bus or cars uni because if you change con constantly and the light can and the light can be beautiful.

✓ I usually take pictures on long bus or car journeys because the scene changes constantly and the light can be beautiful.

Tense and noun issues: 'on the long bus or cars uni' is ungrammatical; use 'on long bus or car journeys'. 'if you change con constantly' is corrupted; intended 'the scene changes constantly'. Removed repeated fragment 'and the light can'. Suggestions: use 'journeys' for trips, use 'scene changes' for shifting views, and avoid repetition. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Well I'm definitely referring the mountain to the sea because I really enjoy the cold and quiet places.

✓ Well, I definitely prefer the mountains to the sea because I really enjoy cold and quiet places.

Word choice and agreement: 'referring the mountain to the sea' is incorrect; 'prefer X to Y' expresses preference. Use plural 'mountains' to match general preference; 'the cold' can be simplified to 'cold'. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and plural nouns when speaking generally about places. Ensure article usage matches countability.

× Also the chilling atmosphere and the fresh air.

✓ I also like the peaceful atmosphere and the fresh air.

Incomplete sentence and adjective choice: 'chilling atmosphere' can be misinterpreted (means frightening); better 'peaceful' or 'calming'. The original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Suggestion: make it a full sentence with a verb and choose adjectives that convey intended meaning ('peaceful', 'calming').

× Umm living in the mountain leave me a beautiful atmosphere and I would love to hiking and relaxing and natural way around away from the city north.

✓ Living in the mountains gives me a beautiful environment, and I would love to go hiking and relax in a natural setting away from the city.

Sentence structure and multiple grammar problems: 'living in the mountain leave me' has subject-verb agreement and article errors; use 'Living in the mountains gives me' (singular verb 'gives'). 'I would love to hiking and relaxing' mixes verb forms; use 'go hiking and relax'. 'natural way around away from the city north' is garbled — corrected to 'in a natural setting away from the city'. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree, use correct verb patterns after 'would love to' ('would love to go hiking'), and restructure fragments into coherent clauses.