Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small grammar issues, and add one specific detail. Use a linking phrase if you add a reason. For example, replace "Our Nepal... it's greenery" with "Nepal's lush landscapes" and remove redundant words like "really" or repeated phrases.

Example: I usually choose a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, Nepal’s lush green hills and terraced fields always cheer me up, so I like to watch them pass by while travelling.

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct repetition and tense issues. Provide a clear main sentence and a brief supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., "but" or "however"). Avoid repeating phrases like "when I'm when I'm" and prefer specific frequency words or a short example.

Example: I don't usually take photos, but if a scene is striking I will take a picture or a short video. For instance, I once recorded a dramatic sunset over the hills and watched the clip later when I had free time.

Suggestion: Make the response clearer and avoid filler words and repetition. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give a specific reason using a linking word like "because". Fix grammar and remove repeated words (e.g., "I I"). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Example: I prefer the mountains. Because I grew up in Nepal I haven't seen the sea, and I feel more connected to mountain landscapes and trekking, so I would choose them over the coast.

× I always choose window seat because I love enjoying the view of our Nepal.

✓ I always choose the window seat because I love enjoying the view of Nepal.

Missing definite article before a specific seat and unnecessary possessive 'our' before country name. Use 'the window seat' to refer to that particular seat type and 'Nepal' without 'our' in this context for natural English.

× Our Nepal is such a beautiful country and it's greenery really makes me happy and overwhelmed.

✓ Nepal is such a beautiful country and its greenery really makes me happy and overwhelmed.

'Our Nepal' is awkward here; use 'Nepal' or 'our country' but not both. Use possessive pronoun 'its' not 'it's' (it is). 'It's' is a contraction for 'it is', so the sentence had the wrong word form.

× I always choose window seat because I love enjoying the view of our Nepal.

✓ I always choose the window seat because I love enjoying the view of Nepal.

The verb 'enjoy' can be followed by an -ing form, so 'enjoying' is acceptable, but keep article and noun forms correct. No change to -ing needed; this item flagged that present participle was used but surrounding wording needed correction.

× I don't usually take photos of anything, but when I feel something needs to be captured and something really catches my view, I take the picture immediately and sometimes I also record them and watch it when I'm when I'm free.

✓ I don't usually take photos, but when something needs to be captured and really catches my eye, I take a picture immediately and sometimes I also record it and watch it when I'm free.

Problems: redundant 'of anything' is unnatural; use 'take photos' or 'take a photo'. 'Catches my view' should be 'catches my eye'. 'Take the picture' -> 'take a picture' for generality. Pronoun agreement: 'record them' mismatches 'a picture'; use 'record it' for a single scene or 'record them' only if plural. Removed duplicate 'when I'm' and adjusted tense consistency.

× I don't usually take photos of anything, but when I feel something needs to be captured and something really catches my view, I take the picture immediately and sometimes I also record them and watch it when I'm when I'm free.

✓ I don't usually take photos, but when something needs to be captured and really catches my eye, I take a picture immediately and sometimes I also record it and watch it when I'm free.

Ensured verb tenses are consistent in present simple. Replaced awkward phrases and fixed pronoun agreement and repetition.

× I really love nature and I'm finding it really hard to choose between mountains and sea.

✓ I really love nature, and I find it really hard to choose between the mountains and the sea.

Use parallel simple present tense ('I find' rather than 'I'm finding') for general statements. Add definite articles 'the' before 'mountains' and 'sea' when speaking generally about those environments.

× But if I really had to just choose only one I would choose mountains because I have not seen any sea in my real life because I I live in Nepal and.

✓ But if I really had to choose only one, I would choose the mountains because I have not seen the sea in my life since I live in Nepal.

Cleanup: remove duplicate 'I', reorder clause for clarity, use 'the sea' (definite article) when referring to that environment generally, and 'in my life' is the usual phrase. 'Since I live in Nepal' clarifies reason. Comma after conditional clause for clarity.