Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency: remove filler words, fix article and word order mistakes, and keep sentences concise (max 4–5). Add one specific detail about what you notice to enrich content. Use a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details with linking words.

Example: Yes, I love looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I often watch changing buildings and fields, and I find the moving scenery relaxing. Because I enjoy observing small details like houses and trees, I rarely fall asleep on journeys.

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and hesitations, correct word choice and phrasing, and provide a specific example or frequency. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make reasoning clear. Keep answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

Example: It depends on my mood; usually I don't take photos from a moving car. However, if the landscape is especially striking — for example, a dramatic mountain range or a colorful sunset — I will stop and take a few pictures. Otherwise I prefer to enjoy the view because it helps me relax.

Suggestion: Avoid vague phrases and repetition; make a clear direct response and give distinct contrasting reasons for each choice. Use linking words (however, while) and finish with a concise opinion. Be specific about activities and feelings when at each location.

Example: I like both, but for different reasons. At the sea I enjoy walking on the shore, watching sunsets, and playing with the sand, whereas in the mountains I appreciate the peaceful landscapes and hiking opportunities. So I choose the sea when I want to relax and the mountains when I want fresh air and exercise.

× That is the my most favorite thing indeed.

✓ That is my most favorite thing indeed.

The definite article 'the' is redundant before the possessive 'my'. Remove 'the' to form the correct phrase 'my most favorite thing'. Also note 'most favorite' is informal redundancy; 'my favorite thing' or 'my most favorite' can be simplified to 'my favorite'.

× I would always love to look out of the bus or car during travelling.

✓ I would always love to look out of the bus or car while travelling.

Use 'while' instead of 'during' before a verb or gerund phrase. 'During' typically precedes a noun (e.g., during the journey). 'Travelling' is acceptable as a gerund here, but 'while travelling' sounds more natural.

× Usually people fall asleep during travelling, but uh, I won't.

✓ Usually people fall asleep while travelling, but I won't.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Also use 'while travelling' as above. The sentence otherwise is fine; contraction 'won't' is acceptable in speech.

× Instead I enjoy the scenery around.

✓ Instead, I enjoy the scenery around me.

Add a comma after 'Instead' and include an object 'me' to clarify whose surroundings are meant. 'Scenery around' is incomplete; 'scenery around me' or 'the surrounding scenery' are correct alternatives.

× It depends. It depends on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Combine the repeated ideas into one concise sentence. Repetition 'It depends. It depends on my mood.' is redundant; concise form improves fluency.

× Most of the time I don't really click pictures.

✓ Most of the time I don't really take pictures.

In English, 'take pictures' is the natural collocation; 'click pictures' is nonstandard. Use 'take' as the correct verb.

× I only take pictures or only when I am in a mood mood or if the if the landscapes are really good.

✓ I only take pictures when I am in the mood or if the landscapes are really good.

Remove repeated words 'only' and duplicated phrases 'mood mood' and 'if the'. Use 'in the mood' (with definite article) for idiomatic expression. Simplify to a single conditional clause.

× Otherwise I just enjoy the nature which gives the relaxed feelings feeling to me.

✓ Otherwise I just enjoy nature, which gives me relaxed feelings.

Remove the article 'the' before 'nature' (nature is uncountable). Use 'gives me relaxed feelings' or better 'makes me feel relaxed'. Avoid duplicate 'feelings feeling'. Place the indirect object 'me' before the adjective phrase for natural word order.

× I love both equally because in the in the sea I enjoy sunset and walking near the shore and playing with the sand and so on while traveling on the mountains then the landscapes would really be so.

✓ I love both equally because at sea I enjoy sunsets, walking along the shore and playing with the sand, while in the mountains I enjoy the landscapes.

Fix repeated 'in the in the' and choose correct prepositions: 'at sea' and 'in the mountains' are idiomatic. Use plural 'sunsets' or 'the sunset' consistently. 'Walking along the shore' is more natural than 'near the shore'. Remove awkward ending 'then the landscapes would really be so' and replace with a clear clause 'I enjoy the landscapes'. Ensure parallel structure between sea and mountains clauses.