Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I love" not "I loved" for a habitual action).

Example: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by car. For example, my family takes road trips every year, and we often drive about 12 hours from Alabama to Florida, so I enjoy watching the changing landscapes. Because I find the scenery relaxing, I usually sit by the window to see fields, forests and small towns along the way.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words (umm, ah) and repetition. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and one example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to make your answer coherent. Keep sentences short and precise.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I enjoy capturing interesting skies and trees. For example, on long drives I take pictures of colourful sunsets and unusual cloud formations to remember the trip.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference in the topic sentence, then add specific reasons and an example. Remove hesitations and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect your reasons. Finish the thought with how it makes you feel.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains now because I find the beach more relaxing and enjoyable. For instance, I like walking along the shore, listening to the waves, and watching the sunset, which makes me feel calm and refreshed.

× Absolutely, I loved looking out at the window whenever I drive or whenever I drive or whenever I'm on the passenger seat.

✓ Absolutely, I love looking out of the window whenever I drive or whenever I'm in the passenger seat.

Errors: inconsistent tense (used 'loved' past with present actions) and repeated phrase. Also incorrect preposition and phrasing 'at the window' -> 'out of the window' and 'on the passenger seat' -> 'in the passenger seat'. Suggestion: Use present simple 'I love' for habitual actions; remove repeated segments and use correct prepositions for clarity.

× My family has Rd. trips typically every year so we drove.

✓ My family has road trips almost every year, so we drive.

Errors: 'Rd.' is an abbreviation not appropriate here and unclear; 'has Rd. trips typically every year' is awkward. Tense mismatch: 'has...every year' (present) followed by 'we drove' (past). Suggestion: Use present simple consistently for habitual events: 'My family has road trips almost every year, so we drive.'

× We drive 12 hours from Alabama to Florida every.

✓ We drive 12 hours from Alabama to Florida every year.

Error: sentence ends with incomplete time expression 'every' without noun. Suggestion: Add the noun 'year' to complete the adverbial phrase: 'every year'.

× Absolutely, I believe half of my umm photos album on my phone is umm the sky and umm the trees that whenever I have a chance to go on a road trip by always taking take photos of them I I think that they make me feel umm.

✓ Absolutely, I believe half of the photos on my phone are of the sky and trees because whenever I have a chance to go on a road trip I always take photos of them; I think they make me feel peaceful.

Errors: 'half of my umm photos album on my phone' is awkward—use 'half of the photos on my phone'. Subject-verb agreement: 'half ... is' -> 'half ... are' when referring to countable photos. Redundant and repeated words, missing conjunctions, and unclear ending. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing, correct subject-verb agreement, and complete the thought with an appropriate adjective ('peaceful' or similar).

× I used to like mountains more than the sea, but for now, umm, at this age, I feel like I tend, I tend to love going to the beach more than umm, mountains or, you know, go on umm, a, a walk or something like that.

✓ I used to like mountains more than the sea, but now I tend to prefer going to the beach more than the mountains, or to go for a walk by the sea.

Issues: wordiness and repetition ('tend, I tend'), awkward phrases ('for now, at this age'). Suggestion: Replace 'for now, at this age' with 'now' for brevity, remove repeated phrases, and use parallel structure ('prefer going to the beach... or to go for a walk').

× But I, I love going to the beach. It's make me feel.

✓ But I love going to the beach. It makes me feel relaxed.

Errors: repeated filler 'I, I'; verb agreement: 'It's make' should be 'It makes' (third person singular). Also the sentence is a fragment 'It makes me feel' needs a complement (e.g., 'relaxed' or 'happy'). Suggestion: Remove repetition, correct subject-verb agreement, and complete the clause with an appropriate adjective.