Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ “tiles” không phù hợp với cảnh qua cửa sổ). Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể liên kết bằng từ nối như “for example” hoặc “because”. Tránh lặp và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu rõ ràng.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching sunsets and passing countryside landscapes. This quiet time makes me feel less stressed after a busy day.

Suggestion: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ không chính xác (ví dụ “keep their memories”, “tears me up when I board” khó hiểu). Cần dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: nêu nguyên nhân và kết quả, thêm từ nối như “because” hoặc “so that”. Tránh biểu cảm mơ hồ; nếu muốn nói cảm xúc khi xem lại ảnh, nên diễn đạt rõ ràng.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of attractive views like mountains and coastlines because I want to remember those moments. Later, looking at the pictures makes me feel nostalgic and reminds me of the trip.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu trôi chảy, có nhiều ngập ngừng và câu chưa hoàn chỉnh. Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer the mountains), tránh lặp từ, dùng liên từ như “because” và cung cấp 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: activities, climate). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu hoàn chỉnh, không để câu bỏ dở.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I like hiking in highland areas in Vietnam during summer with my family, which helps me recharge after hectic days.

× Definitely. I often look out the window to pass the time and enjoy the scenery. I especially like watching sunsets and the tiles we pass, which helps me relax and relieve stress.

✓ Definitely. I often look out the window to pass the time and enjoy the scenery. I especially like watching sunsets and the views we pass, which help me relax and relieve stress.

The phrase 'the tiles we pass' is odd and likely incorrect word choice; 'views we pass' fits the context. Also 'which helps me' refers to 'sunsets and the views' (plural), so the verb should be plural: 'help' not 'helps'. Suggestion: ensure relative clause verb agrees with its plural subject and choose appropriate nouns for meaning.

× Oh absolutely. I always take photos of beautiful views outside the car window, especially mountains or the coastline. I do this to keep their memories and because looking at their pictures later tears me up when I board.

✓ Oh absolutely. I always take photos of beautiful views outside the car window, especially mountains or the coastline. I do this to keep memories of them, and because looking at the pictures later moves me when I look back.

The pronoun 'their' is used incorrectly because it refers to 'views' (inanimate) and is awkward; use 'them' or rephrase as 'memories of them' or 'the pictures'. 'Tears me up when I board' is unnatural and unclear; 'moves me when I look back' is clearer. Suggestion: match pronouns to antecedents and choose natural verbs for emotional response.

× Actually, I'm inclined to, to some mountains because I can immerse myself in natural world.

✓ Actually, I'm inclined to go to the mountains because I can immerse myself in the natural world.

The original has repetition 'to, to some' and missing verb 'go' making it ungrammatical. It also omits the article 'the' before 'natural world'. Suggestion: include the correct verb and articles and remove stuttering/repetition.

× And moreover, I also like going to these areas, especially high highland, uh, areas, uh, in Vietnam in the summer, uh, with my family or friends because I could recharge my batteries after hectic days and more, umm, enjoy the.

✓ Moreover, I like going to these areas, especially highland areas in Vietnam in the summer, with my family or friends because I can recharge my batteries after hectic days and enjoy myself more.

Problems: redundant 'And moreover, I also' — choose one. Repetition 'high highland' and filler 'uh' should be removed. 'could' should be 'can' to match present habitual preference. Sentence was incomplete ending with 'enjoy the.' changed to 'enjoy myself more' to complete thought. Suggestion: remove redundancy and fillers, use consistent tense and complete the sentence.