Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear words, and use linking words to organise ideas. Correct unnatural phrases (e.g., “jest”, “appreciate the gods”) and tense/word choice (use 'look' not 'stare' repeatedly). Aim for 2–4 sentences, with a reason or short example. Pronoun use should be consistent (we/ I).

Example: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy the scenery. For example, on long journeys I open the window slightly and watch the countryside pass by, which helps me relax. If the view is especially beautiful, I might ask the driver to stop so I can take a closer look.

Suggestion: Make the answer more fluent and specific: remove fillers (ums), use a clear tense, and add a brief reason or example. Keep it succinct (2–3 sentences) and use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to explain purpose.

Example: Yes, I often take photos and videos from the car window because I want to capture memorable moments. For instance, last month I filmed a sunset on the highway so I could share it with my family later.

Suggestion: Structure the answer with a clear preference first, then give concise, specific supporting reasons. Avoid self-corrections and fragmented sentences. Use linking words (however, but) when comparing two options. If mentioning both, state which you prefer overall and why.

Example: I prefer the mountains overall because I enjoy the cool, fresh air and the green scenery, which makes me feel relaxed. However, I also like the beach for its beautiful views and sunsets, so I sometimes choose the coast for a short, relaxing trip.

× Yes, absolutely. I really like to see the views and even we like to stop to enjoy the views.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I really like to see the views and sometimes we like to stop to enjoy them.

The sentence uses 'we' awkwardly and repeats 'the views'. Replace 'even' with 'sometimes' for clarity and use the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'views'. This fixes pronoun reference and redundancy. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× So when we're in the bus or in the car, I would open my window.

✓ So when we're on the bus or in the car, I open my window.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'bus' and 'in' with 'car' is acceptable but more natural is 'on the bus'. Also 'would open' suggests conditional; present habitual action requires simple present 'open'. This fixes preposition choice and tense/structure. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× If it's a very good scenery, I would stare.

✓ If the scenery is very good, I stare.

'Scenery' is uncountable and 'a very good scenery' is incorrect; use 'the scenery'. For habitual action use simple present 'I stare' instead of conditional 'I would stare'. This addresses article misuse and tense. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× I would stare outside and then jest and then just give me a moment to appreciate the gods.

✓ I would stare outside and then just take a moment to appreciate it.

'Jest' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'just'. 'Give me a moment' is awkward in this context; use 'take a moment'. 'Appreciate the gods' is incorrect reference; use 'appreciate it' (the scenery). Fixes word choice and sentence coherence. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× Yes, absolutely. I would like to get my phone ready to take some pictures or videos during our umm way our our during our journey so I can capture the moment.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I like to get my phone ready to take pictures or videos during our journey so I can capture the moment.

'Would like to' suggests desire but here describing habitual action so simple present 'I like to' is better. Remove repeated fillers and duplicate words. Also 'some' before 'pictures' is optional; simpler phrase improves clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 4

× Honestly, I would prefer to go to mountain because of the weather and then the greenery surround me.

✓ Honestly, I would prefer to go to the mountains because of the weather and the surrounding greenery.

Use plural 'mountains' or 'the mountain' with article. 'The greenery surround me' has subject-verb agreement and word order issues; use 'the surrounding greenery' to describe it. This fixes article usage, singular/plural and agreement. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× It can. I feels like I can.

✓ It feels like I can breathe better.

Fragments 'It can.' and 'I feels' are incorrect: 'feels' should be 'feels' with subject 'it' and 'I feel' if referring to self. Combine into one complete sentence 'It feels like I can breathe better.' This corrects subject-verb agreement and forms a complete sentence. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× It feels like I can breathe better when I'm around the mountain.

✓ It feels like I can breathe better when I'm around the mountains.

Use 'the mountains' for natural plural reference unless a specific mountain is meant. 'Around the mountain' is possible but less natural in general preference statements. This corrects article/number choice. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× But a scenery side, I prefer beach 'cause it's so pretty.

✓ But as for scenery, I prefer the beach because it's so pretty.

'A scenery side' is ungrammatical; use 'as for scenery' or 'in terms of scenery'. 'Prefer beach' needs article 'the beach'. Avoid informal 'cause' in formal speech; use 'because'. This fixes pronoun/phrase misuse and article error. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12}]}{EIF147} />