Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 중복되고 어순과 시제, 관사 사용에 오류가 있습니다. 응답은 한 문장으로 주제문을 말하고, 추가 정보는 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어야 합니다. 예를 들어 ‘because’가 반복되므로 하나로 정리하고 현재 시제와 동사 형태를 바로잡아야 합니다. 또한 불필요한 말(uh 등)을 줄이고 구체적 이유나 예시를 한두 가지로 압축하세요.

Example: Yes, I do. When I travel to a new country, I always look out of the window because the scenery is unfamiliar and I may never visit that place again, so I want to remember it.

Suggestion: 응답이 비공식적 표현과 어색한 문장 구조로 이루어져 있습니다. ‘sometimes’의 철자와 동사 형태, 미래에 대한 표현을 정확히 고치고, 반복된 ‘because’ 대신 한 번만 이유를 제시하세요. 또한 약어(uh, wanna)는 피하고 구체적 디테일을 추가하세요(예: 어떤 장면을 찍는지, 어떤 기기로 기록하는지).

Example: Sometimes I do. I usually take photos with my phone to capture interesting views like coastlines or old buildings, so I can look back at them later.

Suggestion: 짧고 명확한 답이지만 단순한 대조만 제시되어 깊이가 부족합니다. 주제문 뒤에 이유를 구체적으로 확장하고 연결어(for example, also 등)를 사용해 설명을 풍부하게 하세요. 또한 ‘climbing the mountain’ 대신 ‘hiking’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하면 더 좋습니다.

Example: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. For example, I find seaside walks and water activities more enjoyable than hiking in rough terrain.

× Yes, I do because when I travel in another country because it's all new, so I always looking around the window, uh, because there is no chance to come back in that country for viewing this scenario.

✓ Yes, I do, because when I travel to another country it is all new, so I always look out of the window, since there may not be a chance to return to that country to see the scenery again.

The sentence contains multiple structural and verb form issues: repeated conjunction 'because' and informal fillers create run-on structure; 'travel in another country' should be 'travel to another country' (preposition error) and 'looking' should be simple present 'look' (verb form for habitual action). 'There is no chance to come back in that country for viewing this scenario' is awkward: use 'may not be a chance to return to that country to see the scenery again.' Suggestion: break complex ideas into clear clauses, use correct prepositions (to), use simple present for habitual actions, and choose natural collocations (look out of the window, see the scenery again).

× Sometime yes uh, because I wanna record in my camera because I can't look it back uh, in future.

✓ Sometimes, yes, because I want to record it on my camera since I won't be able to look back at it in the future.

Errors: 'Sometime' should be plural 'Sometimes' (frequency adverb); 'wanna' is informal; 'record in my camera' should be 'record it on my camera' (preposition and object placement); 'I can't look it back' is incorrect word order and tense—use 'I won't be able to look back at it' for future inability. Suggestion: use standard adverbs ('sometimes'), formal contractions ('want to'), correct prepositions ('on my camera'), and correct phrasal verb order ('look back at it') with appropriate future tense when referring to later time.

× I prefer the sea because I don't like climbing the mountain, but I like swimming.

✓ I prefer the sea because I don't like climbing mountains, but I like swimming.

Issue: 'climbing the mountain' sounds like a specific mountain; for general preference use plural 'mountains' (singular/plural choice). The rest of the sentence uses correct present simple for habitual preferences. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally ('mountains'), and maintain simple present for likes/dislikes.