Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Main points are clear but the answer is repetitive and has grammar issues. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences), start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct word forms and avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the changing scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching local houses and fields pass by, which helps me feel calm and notice details about different places.

Suggestion: Good intention, but sentences are repetitive and include grammatical errors. Provide one clear reason with a specific example, use linking words (for example, so), and avoid redundant phrases like 'I have to'.

Example: Yes, I often take photos from the car window so I can remember places I might not visit again. For example, I recently photographed an old village while passing by, and those pictures help me recall the scene later.

Suggestion: Answer is unclear and disorganized with fillers and incorrect word order. Start with a direct statement (I like both, but...), then give a concise comparison with one or two specific reasons, using linking words (however, whereas). Avoid fillers like 'umm' and 'right'.

Example: I like both the mountains and the sea, but for different reasons. For instance, I prefer the mountains for their peaceful trails and panoramic views, whereas I enjoy the sea for its beaches and lively atmosphere.

× Yes, because I love to watch in the window when I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, because I love to look out of the window when I'm traveling.

The original uses 'watch in the window' which is incorrect collocation. Use the verb phrase 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' with the preposition 'out of' to indicate looking outside. Also 'look' is more natural than 'watch' for scenery. Ensure preposition placement: 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'.

× Because I enjoy watching the scenery outside and it makes me comfortable and I prefer to watch outside the window.

✓ I enjoy watching the scenery outside because it makes me feel comfortable, and I prefer to look out the window.

The original contains sentence fragments and repetition. Starting with 'Because' created a fragment; combine clauses into one complete sentence. Use 'feel comfortable' rather than 'makes me comfortable' for natural phrasing, and replace the second 'watch outside the window' with 'look out the window' to avoid redundancy and correct collocation.

× Yes, because I love taking photos for keeping memories just in case I cannot go back in that place again.

✓ Yes, because I love taking photos to keep memories in case I cannot return to that place.

Use the infinitive 'to keep' instead of the gerund phrase 'for keeping' for purpose. 'Go back in that place' is incorrect preposition use; use 'return to that place'. Also remove redundant 'again'.

× I have to capture it to save as a memories.

✓ I have to capture it to save it as a memory.

Article and number errors: 'a memories' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'memories'. Use singular 'a memory' or plural 'memories' without 'a'. Also include the pronoun 'it' after 'save' for clarity.

× I like traveling also take photos in the in that particular area.

✓ I like traveling and also taking photos in that particular area.

The original lacks proper conjunction structure. Use 'and also taking' to join activities and correct the duplicated preposition 'in the in'. Use gerund 'taking' to follow 'also'.

× I prefer boats, mountains or sea because, umm, when I go into the mountains, right, Yeah, I prefer the view and when I go to see area, I prefer the to see the beaches, the peoples, the scenery, everything.

✓ I prefer mountains and the sea because, when I go to the mountains I prefer the views, and when I visit coastal areas I prefer to see the beaches, the people and the scenery.

Multiple issues: 'boats, mountains or sea' is inconsistent; better to say 'mountains and the sea'. 'Go into the mountains' is less natural than 'go to the mountains'. 'Go to see area' should be 'visit coastal areas' and 'prefer the to see' is incorrect; use 'prefer to see'. 'Peoples' should be 'people' (uncountable in this context). Also improve parallel structure and remove filler words for clarity.

× So I like both.

✓ So I like both.

This sentence is grammatically correct but short; no change needed. It suitably concludes the previous statement indicating preference for both options.