Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự câu để tự nhiên hơn; rút gọn ý để tránh lặp từ; thêm liên từ hợp lý để bài nói mạch lạc. Cụ thể: dùng thì đúng (e.g. 'when I travel'), sửa cấu trúc như 'it helps me relax' thay cho cụm từ lắp lại, và giới hạn trong tối đa 3-4 câu. Bạn cũng nên thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ một cảnh bạn thích) để làm câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

Example: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching landscapes because they are relaxing, especially green fields and old villages. It helps me unwind after a long day, and sometimes I spot interesting scenes that inspire me to take photos.

Suggestion: Giảm lặp từ, tránh tiếng 'um' và hoàn thành ý cuối cùng; dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng để trả lời trực tiếp trước khi giải thích điều kiện. Ví dụ nói rõ: 'I sometimes take photos, but only if...' và nêu một lý do cụ thể. Tránh câu chưa hoàn chỉnh và sử dụng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'also' để kết nối ý.

Example: I sometimes take photos of the scenery from the car, but only if the window is clean and the view is interesting. If the light is good and the scene is attractive, I stop to take a picture because dirty glass or reflections ruin the shot.

Suggestion: Sử dụng thì và danh từ đúng (e.g. 'depends on the season', 'I prefer mountains in winter'), tránh lặp và sửa lỗi số nhiều/đếm (e.g. 'each season has its most beautiful'). Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi giải thích với ví dụ ngắn gọn, giới hạn 2-3 câu.

Example: It depends on the season: I prefer mountains in winter and early spring because I enjoy snowy landscapes, while in summer I prefer the sea for swimming and sunshine. Each season has its own beauty, so my choice changes accordingly.

× Of course, whenever I have traveling by bus or car, I'll always look outside and enjoy the scenery.

✓ Of course, whenever I am traveling by bus or car, I always look outside and enjoy the scenery.

The phrase 'have traveling' is incorrect. Use the present continuous 'am traveling' to describe being in the process of traveling. Also, 'I'll always' suggests future; 'I always' is more natural for habitual action. Use 'I am traveling' or 'I travel' depending on emphasis.

× For me, the scenery is really beautiful and the way I enjoy it, it will help me stress relief forget after a long day or a long time I have been working.

✓ For me, the scenery is really beautiful, and enjoying it helps me relieve stress after a long day or after working for a long time.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and inappropriate word forms: 'help me stress relief forget' is ungrammatical. Use the verb phrase 'relieve stress' or 'help me relieve stress'. Rearrange clauses for clarity and use parallel structure 'after a long day or after working for a long time'.

× I always enjoy taking photo outside the car for the scenery, but it's, it's depend, for example, uh, depend on the cleaning of the window, is it clean or not?

✓ I always enjoy taking photos out of the car of the scenery, but it depends, for example, on how clean the window is.

Use the plural 'photos' not 'photo' for the general activity. 'It's depend' is incorrect; use 'it depends'. Also simplify 'depend on the cleaning of the window' to 'on how clean the window is' for natural phrasing.

× And it will help me feel the picture better.

✓ A cleaner window helps me take better pictures.

The original sentence is unclear and wordy. 'It will help me feel the picture better' is unidiomatic. Express the idea clearly: a clean window allows better photos; use 'take better pictures'.

× It's just depend on the season.

✓ It just depends on the season.

Use the present tense third-person singular 'depends' with 'it'. 'It's just' contracts 'it is just' which is fine, but the verb must be 'depends'.

× For example for the January or spring or winter I would prefer to look at the mountain and for the summer I would prefer to watch the sea.

✓ For example, in January or in winter or in spring I prefer to look at the mountains, and in summer I prefer to look at the sea.

Use preposition 'in' with months and seasons: 'in January', 'in winter'. Use plural 'mountains' when speaking generally. 'Watch the sea' is less natural than 'look at the sea'. Also prefer present simple 'I prefer' for general preferences.

× So it depends because each season have their most beautiful.

✓ So it depends because each season has its most beautiful moments.

Subject 'each season' is singular, so use 'has' not 'have'. Use the possessive 'its' not 'their'. The phrase 'its most beautiful' is incomplete; add a noun like 'moments' or 'scenery' to complete the thought.