Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "at the window" twice) and finish the answer cleanly.

Example: It depends on my mood and energy levels. If I'm tired, I usually sleep, but when I'm awake I like to look out the window and sometimes take photos or short videos so I can remember the place later.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence then one or two specific reasons linked logically. Correct grammar (use singular/plural correctly, add articles) and avoid long run-on sentences by using linking words like "because" or "so" and punctuation.

Example: Yes, I usually take photos. Because I visit many new places, my phone often runs out of memory, but I like saving pictures to look back on them later or to share on social media.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence that states your preference or that you have no fixed preference, then give specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar ("hard question" -> "a hard question", "ex swimmer" -> "a former swimmer") and avoid vague phrases like "it's so difficult."

Example: I don't have a fixed preference; it depends. For example, I prefer the sea when I want to swim because I'm a former swimmer, but I choose the mountains when I want quiet and beautiful scenery.

× Depends on my mood and my condition.

✓ It depends on my mood and my condition.

Missing subject and incorrect verb form for present simple. In statements you need a subject (it) and the verb should be in third-person singular form 'depends'. Use 'It depends' to make a complete sentence.

× If I feel sleepy, I prefer to sleep.

✓ If I feel sleepy, I prefer to sleep.

Sentence is grammatically correct for present habitual condition; no change needed.

× If I feel well, yes, I'm looking at at the window.

✓ If I feel well, yes, I look out the window.

Use simple present 'I look' for habitual actions rather than present continuous 'I'm looking'. Also remove the duplicated preposition 'at at' and use 'out the window' or 'out of the window'. 'Look out the window' is the natural phrasing.

× I'm taking the videos, taking the pictures to remember later about this place and the.

✓ I take videos and pictures to remember the place later.

Use simple present 'I take' for habitual actions instead of present continuous. Remove redundant 'taking' and awkward 'about this place and the.' Place 'later' after the object and drop the trailing fragment.

× Most of the time, yes. That's why my camera, my phone always have a problem with the memory because I take a lot of pictures and videos of new location, I would like to see them later when I reach my destination or post it on my social media accounts. So yes, usually I take it.

✓ Most of the time, yes. That's why my camera and my phone always have problems with memory because I take a lot of pictures and videos of new locations. I would like to see them later when I reach my destination or post them on my social media accounts. So yes, usually I do.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('phone always have' -> 'phone always have problems' needs plural 'problems' but better combine subjects 'camera and my phone' with plural 'have problems'); countable noun 'new location' should be plural 'new locations'; pronoun reference 'post it' should be 'post them' referring to pictures/videos; 'take it' is vague—use 'do' or 'take photos'—here 'do' fits. Also split into clearer sentences.

× It's actually so hard question for me.

✓ It's actually a hard question for me.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'hard question'. Also 'so hard' is acceptable but 'a hard question' is more natural here.

× I asked myself a few times before your question because it depends on my condition.

✓ I asked myself a few times before you asked the question because it depends on my condition.

Tense consistency problem: 'before your question' is awkward; use 'before you asked the question' to show prior action. 'Asked myself a few times' is past, so the clause referring to the examiner's action should be past as well.

× Sometimes I prefer the sea because I'm ex swimmer and sometimes I prefer mountains because it's so beautiful.

✓ Sometimes I prefer the sea because I'm an ex-swimmer, and sometimes I prefer the mountains because they are so beautiful.

Missing article before 'ex-swimmer' ('an ex-swimmer'). Also 'mountains' as plural should be referred to with plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are' instead of 'it's'.

× Also it's so difficult.

✓ Also, it's difficult to choose.

Sentence is vague and slightly informal. 'It's so difficult' is grammatical but adding 'to choose' clarifies the meaning in context. Comma after 'Also' improves flow.