Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Also finish the sentence (your last sentence is incomplete) and use varied vocabulary (e.g., observe, surroundings). Aim for 3–4 sentences total.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing my surroundings. For example, I like to notice new buildings or changes in the neighbourhood, which helps me understand the area better. However, I stay safety-conscious and avoid anything that distracts me from boarding or getting off.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and filler words, and organise your answer: a clear condition (when you take photos) followed by two specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and more precise vocabulary (e.g., unfamiliar, landmarks). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I only take photos from the car when the place is unfamiliar because I want a visual record of the route and the landmarks. For instance, when I first visited a town I photographed distinctive buildings to help me remember where to turn. In familiar places I rarely take pictures unless something unusual is happening.

Suggestion: Organise a concise answer: state preference, give two clear reasons with linking words, avoid informal phrases like 'you know' and correct grammar (singular/plural: 'mountains' and 'water-phobic'). Use a broader range of vocabulary (e.g., hiking, panoramic views, fear of deep water). Limit to 3 sentences.

Example: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and getting panoramic views from higher ground. Also, I have a fear of deep water, so mountainous areas feel safer and more relaxing to me. The mountains also help me clear my mind and think more calmly.

× Usually I look at the window.

✓ Usually I look out of the window.

The student used 'look at the window' which is grammatically possible but in context 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' is the natural collocation when observing scenery. Use the prepositional phrase 'out of' or 'out' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I usually look out of the window' or 'I usually look out the window.'

× I look out the window when I'm in a bus or in a car travelling.

✓ I look out the window when I'm on a bus or in a car travelling.

The correct preposition for buses is 'on' not 'in' when referring to being a passenger on public transport. Use 'in' for cars. Keep present continuous 'I'm... travelling' is acceptable. Suggestion: 'when I'm on a bus or in a car.'

× But even with the looking out of the window, I'm still conscious of my environment.

✓ But even when I look out of the window, I'm still conscious of my environment.

'with the looking out of the window' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use a clause 'when I look out of the window' to express the time. This fixes sentence structure and improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'when I look out of the window'.

× I'm still safety conscious and ensure that I do not.

✓ I'm still safety-conscious and ensure that I do not (do anything dangerous).

The phrase ends abruptly 'ensure that I do not.' The verb phrase needs an object or complement. Also 'safety conscious' is better hyphenated as 'safety-conscious' when used adjectivally. Suggestion: complete the clause, for example 'ensure that I do not do anything dangerous.'

× It depends on on the place you know that I'm going to.

✓ It depends on the place I'm going to.

Duplicate 'on' is an error. Also 'you know' is colloquial filler and unnecessary. Simplify to 'It depends on the place I'm going to.' Suggestion: remove the extra 'on' and filler 'you know.'

× If it's a a new place, a new environment I do take, I may take photos just to ensure that I know for memory and also to remember the routes you know that I've taken.

✓ If it's a new place or environment, I may take photos to remember it and the routes I've taken.

Multiple issues: duplicate 'a', awkward insertion 'I do take', unnecessary filler 'you know', and redundant phrases 'to ensure that I know for memory' which is unclear. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct. Suggestion: remove fillers and redundant words and use 'may take photos to remember it and the routes I've taken.'

× But if it is a familiar place, normally I will not take the pictures except if something new is happening.

✓ But if it's a familiar place, I normally won't take pictures unless something new is happening.

Use contraction 'won't' or 'will not' consistently. 'Except if' is nonstandard; use 'unless'. Also 'take the pictures' -> 'take pictures' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'unless' and remove 'the.'

× I prefer mountains to the sea, and the reason I prefer mountains to the sea is because with mountain I could exercise my legs, I could see things from a higher level.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea, and the reason is that in the mountains I can exercise my legs and see things from a higher level.

Use definite article 'the mountains' and 'the sea' when speaking generally about those landscapes. 'with mountain' is incorrect; use 'in the mountains'. Use 'can' instead of 'could' to match present preference. Also combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: 'in the mountains I can...'.

× I don't get drowned.

✓ I don't drown.

'Drown' is an active verb; 'get drowned' is passive and usually used differently. For speaking about not experiencing drowning, use 'I don't drown' or 'I won't drown' depending on context. Suggestion: use 'I don't drown.'

× I'm water phobia and as such I'll prefer mountain to sea.

✓ I'm afraid of water, so I prefer the mountains to the sea.

'I'm water phobia' is ungrammatical; 'water phobia' is a noun phrase describing a condition. Use adjective phrase 'afraid of water' or 'I have a fear of water.' Also match articles: 'the mountains' and 'the sea.' Use present simple 'prefer' for general preference rather than 'I'll prefer.' Suggestion: 'I'm afraid of water, so I prefer the mountains.'

× And you know from mountain it gives you a bigger perspective to think.

✓ And, from the mountains you get a broader perspective for thinking.

'from mountain' needs article and plural: 'from the mountains'. 'gives you a bigger perspective to think' is awkward; use 'you get a broader perspective for thinking' or 'it gives you a broader perspective.' Suggestion: 'you get a broader perspective for thinking.'