Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and unnatural expressions (e.g. “grateful for the opportunity that I get to see all of that”, “happy inside out”).

Example: Yes. I often look out the window when I travel because I enjoy seeing changing landscapes. For example, I like watching farmland and small villages pass by, which helps me relax and forget about work.

Suggestion: Make a direct topic sentence and then add a specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating conjunctions (‘but’ twice) and vague phrases like ‘not capable of capturing’. Use one linking word to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because they help me remember trips. Although a photo can’t capture everything, I still take shots of interesting views — for instance, a sunset over a valley — to look back on later.

Suggestion: Answer clearly and give specific reasons with linking words. Replace awkward vocabulary (e.g. ‘hydrophobic’ is a technical term; say ‘afraid of deep water’). Keep it concise and combine sentences to avoid repetition.

Example: I prefer the mountains. I’ve always loved hiking and the green scenery, and I’m uncomfortable around deep water, so I avoid the sea. For example, I enjoy weekend hikes in forested hills because they are peaceful and scenic.

× Yes indeed, I feel I travel for that very reason, to look out the window at the scenery.

✓ Yes indeed, I feel I travel for that very reason: to look out the window at the scenery.

Run-on/clarity issue and punctuation: The clause after 'reason' explains purpose and is better introduced with a colon or rephrased. Also 'I feel I travel' is acceptable but slightly awkward; keeping present tense is correct. Use a colon to clarify purpose and improve readability.

× I find it very enchanting and grateful for the opportunity that I get to see all of that and experience all of it.

✓ I find it very enchanting and am grateful for the opportunity to see and experience it all.

Incorrect adjective use: 'grateful' describes a person, not the scenery; the sentence needed a subject for 'grateful' and a more natural verb form. Combine verbs 'see' and 'experience' with 'to' and use 'it all' for fluidity.

× It's the best feeling that I can ever get.

✓ It's the best feeling I can ever have.

Verb choice and collocation: native speakers say 'have a feeling' rather than 'get a feeling' in this context. Use present simple 'can' with 'have' to keep tense consistent.

× It makes me forget about all my stress and makes me really happy inside out.

✓ It makes me forget all my stress and makes me really happy inside and out.

Idiomatic expression: 'inside out' is incorrect for emotions; correct idiom is 'inside and out'. Also 'forget about all my stress' is wordy; 'forget all my stress' is clearer.

× Yes, I do love taking pictures of the scenery outside, but I also think that I am not capable of capturing those moments in a small image.

✓ Yes, I do love taking pictures of the scenery outside, but I also think I am not capable of capturing those moments in a small image.

Unnecessary tense/formality: Removing 'that' makes the sentence more natural in present tense. The structure is otherwise correct.

× But it's a really good token that I take back with me to look back at the travel that I did and the moments and the sceneries that I've enjoyed.

✓ But it's a really good memento that I take back with me to look back on the trip I took and the moments and scenery I enjoyed.

Article and word choice: 'token' is awkward; 'memento' is better. Use 'look back on' (correct preposition). 'Travel' should be 'trip' for countability, and 'scenery' is uncountable, so 'sceneries' is incorrect. Use past simple 'took' to match 'I enjoyed'.

× Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?

✓ Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Preference question correctly uses definite article for both options.

× As a kid I always preferred mountains and I think even as an adult now I still love mountains.

✓ As a kid I always preferred the mountains, and I think even now as an adult I still love them.

Article and pronoun clarity: Use 'the mountains' for a general class and add pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. Word order 'now as an adult' is more natural.

× I don't like the sea because I have always been hydrophobic.

✓ I don't like the sea because I have always been hydrophobic.

Sentence is grammatically correct. Note: 'hydrophobic' is a technical term; in everyday speech 'afraid of the sea' or 'I have always feared the sea' may be clearer, but no grammar change is required.

× That is, I have a fear of seas and waters and going near waters.

✓ That is, I have a fear of the sea and of going near the water.

Incorrect pluralization and preposition use: 'seas and waters' is awkward; use singular 'the sea' and 'the water'. Use 'of' after 'fear' and 'going near the water' for natural phrasing.

× So for that particular reasons, I like mountains.

✓ So for that particular reason, I like the mountains.

Number agreement and article use: 'reasons' should be singular 'reason' when preceded by 'that particular'. Also add 'the' before 'mountains' for general reference and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I love the greenery and I love hiking.

✓ I love the greenery, and I love hiking.

Sentence is grammatically fine; only punctuation added for clarity. No pronoun error. Keep parallel structure.