Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and natural but a bit wordy and repetitive. Aim for a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and avoid repeating the same idea ("scenery views" and "from a window"). Also shorten to no more than five sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., "capture" instead of "record").

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy seeing the passing landscapes. For example, I often capture interesting scenes on my phone to share on Instagram, especially when the light and colours are striking.

Suggestion: The response repeats previous information and uses informal language ("wanna"). To improve, give a concise direct answer and add a specific reason or one brief example. Use formal spoken English and avoid slang. Keep it within five sentences and use linking words like "so" or "because."

Example: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I like sharing beautiful scenes on social media. For instance, I recently photographed a mountain range at sunset and posted it on Instagram, which got a lot of positive comments.

Suggestion: Good content and clear preference, but the answer is slightly long and has minor grammar issues ("majority of my friends," "track" should be "trek" or "hike"). Improve by making a clear topic sentence, then add one or two precise supporting details with correct grammar and linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "relax" or "recharge").

Example: I prefer the mountains to the sea because they are peaceful and very scenic. For example, many of my friends live in Himachal Pradesh, so I often go hiking there to relax and spend quality time with them.

× Yes, I always prefer to look outside the car or bus while seeing some scenery views from a window.

✓ Yes, I always prefer to look out of the car or bus window to see the scenery.

The original sentence uses an awkward combination of verbs and prepositions ('look outside the car or bus while seeing some scenery views from a window'). Use simple present for habitual action and a clearer verb phrase: 'look out of the car or bus window' and 'to see the scenery'. Remove redundant words like 'some' and 'views' to make it natural. ID:6

× And I also like to record those scenery views from my mobile phone so that I can post those shots on my Instagram reels or stories.

✓ I also like to record the scenery with my mobile phone so that I can post the shots on my Instagram reels or stories.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'scenery' when referring to specific views just mentioned. 'Record those scenery views' is unidiomatic; use 'record the scenery' or 'record those views'. Also 'my mobile phone' is fine but 'with my mobile phone' is clearer. ID:17

× As I told you earlier that I always prefer to capture some shots regarding to the scenery views from outside car window because I wanna post those shorts on my Instagram reels or my other social media handle so that I can have some likes and comments on it.

✓ As I told you earlier, I always prefer to capture shots of the scenery outside the car window because I want to post those shots on my Instagram reels or other social media accounts to get likes and comments.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'regarding to' is incorrect; use 'of' for 'shots of the scenery'. 'Outside car window' needs 'the' ('outside the car window'). Informal 'wanna' should be 'want to'. 'Shorts' is likely a typo for 'shots'. 'My other social media handle' should be 'other social media accounts'. Also streamline the purpose clause: 'to get likes and comments.' ID:11

× I prefer mountains to the sea because it offers tranquility and beautiful scenery and majority of my friends are from Himachal Pradesh so I usually go there to track and it also helps me to unwind and spend the quality time with my friend.

✓ I prefer mountains to the sea because they offer tranquility and beautiful scenery, and a majority of my friends are from Himachal Pradesh, so I usually go there to trek; it also helps me unwind and spend quality time with my friends.

Subject-verb agreement: 'mountains' is plural, so use 'they offer' not 'it offers' (Third person singular issue). 'Majority' needs an article: 'a majority' or 'the majority'. 'Track' is a misspelling; context requires 'trek'. 'Spend the quality time' should be 'spend quality time', and 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match context. ID:2