Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid unrelated words (e.g. "suddenly") and grammar errors. Use correct tense and prepositions (e.g. "in Shimla", "look out of the window"). Keep to under five sentences and use a linking word if you add details.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, when I visited Shimla last year, I spent most of the journey watching the pine-covered hills and villages pass by. I enjoy noting interesting scenes because they make the trip feel more relaxing.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence and give one specific reason or example. Avoid repetition ("something special and something unique") and use linking words (e.g. "because", "for example"). Use more precise vocabulary ("memorable", "scenic"). Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

Example: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the car window because I want to capture memorable views. For example, I stopped and photographed a dramatic valley once because the light and colors were unusual and worth remembering.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer first ("I prefer the mountains") and then add a specific, concise reason using linking words ("because", "as"). Avoid unnecessary repetition about travelling. Provide one concrete detail about the mountain atmosphere (e.g. "fresh air", "peaceful trails"). Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh, cool air and peaceful hiking trails. For instance, staying in a mountain cottage allows me to wake up to quiet forests and great views, which I find more relaxing than crowded beaches.

× Being a travel buff, I travel a lot. Suddenly I travel Shimla where I usually see the window at this country when I was travelling.

✓ Being a travel buff, I travel a lot. On one trip I went to Shimla, where I used to look out of the window whenever I was travelling.

Sentence structure errors: The original contains awkward sequencing and mixed tenses. 'Suddenly I travel Shimla' is ungrammatical; use 'On one trip I went to Shimla' for a past event. 'I usually see the window at this country' is incorrect phrasing and preposition use; correct is 'I used to look out of the window' and 'in that country' or omit country since Shimla is a place. Also align tense: describe past travel with past forms ('went', 'used to', 'was travelling'). Suggestion: Break ideas into two clear sentences, use proper past tense for past events, and use 'look out of the window' for the action.

× Usually I take the photos of the scenery outside the car window when there is something special and something unique and there is some memorable thing which I remember for that place.

✓ I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window when there is something special or memorable about the place.

Present tense and wordiness issues: 'Usually I take the photos' is acceptable but 'the photos' is overly specific; 'take photos' is more natural. The original uses repetitive and redundant phrases ('something special and something unique and there is some memorable thing'); combine into 'something special or memorable'. Also 'which I remember for that place' is awkward; 'about the place' is clearer. Suggestion: simplify and avoid redundant words, keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Usually I always tell I travel a lot. Being a travel buff I travel both places, mountains and sea. But I usually prefer mountains because of the atmosphere is good.

✓ I always say that I travel a lot. As a travel buff, I visit both the mountains and the sea, but I usually prefer the mountains because the atmosphere is better.

Sentence structure and comparison errors: 'Usually I always tell I travel a lot' is ungrammatical; use 'I always say that I travel a lot.' 'I travel both places, mountains and sea' should be 'I visit both the mountains and the sea.' The clause 'because of the atmosphere is good' mixes structures; use 'because the atmosphere is better' or 'because the atmosphere there is good.' Suggestion: use 'say' for reporting speech, 'visit' for places, and use comparative 'better' when comparing mountains and sea.