Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar and pronunciation, and organize your response with a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and small errors (lookout vs. look out, widow vs. window, 'at the best or car' unclear). Use linking words to connect ideas, for example: 'because' and 'so'.

Example: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the passing scenery is fascinating and relaxing. I also prefer watching the view to scrolling through social media, so I usually spend the trip looking outside.

Suggestion: Make your answer clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a direct response, then give a concise explanation with clear linking words (because, so, therefore). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use correct tense and word order. Mention a specific condition when you would take photos to add detail.

Example: Not usually, because photos taken through a moving window are often blurry. I prefer to take pictures when the bus or car stops at a scenic spot, as the view is clearer and I can compose the shot properly.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, then add two specific reasons with linking words (because, and, although). Correct grammar (plural/singular, word order) and avoid fillers. Replace vague phrases ('make me can feel comfortable') with precise expressions. Add a short example or personal detail to strengthen your answer.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains. I find the sea calming because I enjoy the sound of the waves and the fresh sea breeze, and I always feel relaxed there. In contrast, I sometimes worry about encountering wild animals in the mountains, so I choose the coast.

× Yes I do, I often lookout window at scenery when traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I do. I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

The original uses 'lookout' (a noun) instead of the verb phrase 'look out' and omits articles. Use the base verb 'look out' followed by the definite article 'the' before 'window' and 'the' before 'scenery' to be grammatically correct and natural. Also add punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'look out' for the action and include articles: 'look out the window at the scenery.'

× Umm literally.

✓ Um, literally,

As a filler, 'literally' is unnecessary and not a conjunction. In spoken language it may be used, but as part of a sentence it should be attached to surrounding speech with commas. This fix keeps the filler but makes punctuation consistent. Suggestion: Avoid overusing 'literally' unless emphasizing a literal meaning; use 'um' or 'well' to pause.

× The scenery past uh from the widow is so fascinating and also I don't wanna scroll in social media at the best or car so that's why I look at the window at scenery.

✓ The scenery passing by from the window is so fascinating, and I don't want to scroll through social media in the bus or car, so that's why I look out the window at the scenery.

Multiple preposition errors: 'past' should be 'passing by' or 'passes by'; 'from the widow' should be 'from the window'; 'scroll in social media' should be 'scroll through social media'; 'at the best or car' is unclear—interpreted as 'in the bus or car'; 'look at the window at scenery' should be 'look out the window at the scenery'. Suggestions: Use 'pass by' or 'passing by', 'from the window', 'scroll through social media', and 'look out the window at the scenery'.

× Not actually umm, cause uh, when I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, it will uh, move, right?

✓ Not really, because when I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, it moves, right?

The original uses 'will...move' which implies future; here a general truth about motion while moving should use present simple 'moves'. Also 'Not actually' is better as 'Not really', and 'cause' should be 'because' in more formal speech. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual or general facts: 'it moves.'

× And uh, the scenery is, can be captured, uh, directly or like clearly, but when the bus or car stopped, it's able to take beautiful.

✓ And the scenery can be captured clearly when the vehicle is still, but when the bus or car is stopped, it's possible to take beautiful photos.

Problems: unnecessary passive markers and tense inconsistency. 'Can be captured directly or like clearly' is awkward; use 'can be captured clearly.' 'When the bus or car stopped' mixes past with general statement; use 'is stopped' or 'is still.' 'It's able to take beautiful' lacks an object; specify 'photos.' Suggestion: Use 'can be captured clearly' and 'when the bus or car is stopped' and include the object 'photos.'

× And I prefer sea to mountain.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains.

Comparative preference requires definite articles before specific natural features: 'the sea' and 'the mountains'. Also use plural 'mountains' for general comparison. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer the sea to the mountains.'

× And of course the mountains are also beautiful, but uh, sea always, uh, make me can feel comfortable.

✓ Of course the mountains are also beautiful, but the sea always makes me feel comfortable.

Subject-verb agreement and word order issue: 'sea' as singular subject needs verb 'makes' (third person singular). 'Make me can feel comfortable' is ungrammatical — use 'makes me feel comfortable.' Also include 'the' before 'sea.' Suggestion: Use correct third-person singular verb and simple complement: 'the sea always makes me feel comfortable.'

× And also I love the wind at sea and also the mountains may appear some creature that will scares me.

✓ I also love the sea breeze, and sometimes creatures in the mountains can scare me.

'Wind at sea' is better phrased as 'sea breeze' or 'wind at sea'; 'may appear some creature' is ungrammatical—use 'sometimes creatures in the mountains can scare me.' 'That will scares me' has extra 's' and wrong auxiliary; use 'can scare me.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('sea breeze') and correct word order: 'sometimes creatures in the mountains can scare me.'