Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve accuracy and natural phrasing. Use the correct word ('scenery' not 'sensory'), avoid extra articles, and make the sentence more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence and add one brief supporting detail using a linking word.

Example: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car because I find the scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching the changing countryside as it helps me unwind.

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and improve coherence. Provide one clear reason and a linking phrase to connect ideas. Use correct plurals and avoid repeating the same phrase multiple times.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I sometimes spot beautiful places. Then I usually share the best pictures with my friends online.

Suggestion: Clarify preference and correct word choice ('sea' not 'see'). Give one or two specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar. Avoid repeating words and keep it within a few sentences.

Example: I prefer the sea because it feels peaceful and I enjoy swimming. Also, I like playing beach games with friends, which makes a seaside holiday more fun.

× Yes, I look out the window at the sensory when travelling by a car because it is very comfortable for me.

✓ Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when travelling by a car because it is very comfortable for me.

The student used 'sensory' which is an adjective related to senses, not the noun 'scenery' meaning landscape. Replace with 'scenery'. This is a word-choice error; choose nouns that match the intended meaning. Also note 'travelling by a car' is acceptable but more natural is 'travelling by car' (omit the article 'a'). Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because sometimes I can see beautiful places and I take a pictures and share with my friends so I take pictures outside.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because sometimes I can see beautiful places, and I take pictures to share with my friends, so I often take pictures outside.

Errors: 'a pictures' is incorrect because 'a' cannot modify the plural 'pictures'. Also sentence run-on and awkward phrasing. Use 'take pictures' (no article) and 'to share with my friends' to show purpose. Add commas to separate clauses and 'often' to reflect frequency. This addresses article misuse and sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I prefer to see because it is very peaceful for me and I like to swim in and I I can play some games in the beach so I like to see.

✓ I prefer the sea because it is very peaceful for me, and I like to swim and play games on the beach, so I like the sea.

Multiple issues: 'see' is a misspelling of 'sea' (word choice/pronoun confusion). 'I like to swim in' is incomplete — add the object 'the sea' or omit 'in'. 'I I' is a repetition. Use 'on the beach' (correct preposition). Replace 'to see' with 'the sea'. Reorganize clauses for clarity and correct preposition usage. This fixes pronoun/word choice errors, preposition error, and repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 12