Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Говорите более естественно и кратко: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одно конкретное пояснение и пример. Избегайте повторов, заполнителей типа «uh» и грамматических ошибок (например, «work at the scenery» -> «look at the scenery», «out of window» -> «out of the window», «the only way how I can» -> «the only way I can»). Также следите за количеством предложений (не более 4–5).

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window because it helps me relax and think. For example, when I travel home from work I watch the streets and buildings and often plan my day or solve problems in my head.

Suggestion: Сократите и упростите ответ: начните с «Yes» или «No», затем поясните одно-двумя точными предложениями. Уберите повторы («not not») и заполнители («like», «uh»). Укажите конкретный пример, когда вы обычно фотографируете, и почему это для вас важно.

Example: Yes, I often take photos from windows when I travel. For instance, I usually photograph interesting city views from the train or dramatic cloud formations from a plane because I like to keep memories of places I visit.

Suggestion: Начинайте с чёткого заявления («I prefer the sea») и сразу давайте 1–2 конкретные причины. Избегайте сомнений и противоречивых фраз («I've never been near the sea» сразу после «I prefer the sea» лучше объяснить). Уберите повторы («so it's so») и заполнители. Можно добавить короткий пример или воспоминание.

Example: I prefer the sea because I find the movement of the waves very relaxing and beautiful. Although I haven't spent much time at the coast, I enjoy watching videos and photos of beaches, and I hope to visit one soon to experience it in person.

× Yes I am and this is actually my favorite hobby because every time I work at the scenery out of window, I always, uh, I'm always dreaming or thinking about something.

✓ Yes, I do, and this is actually my favorite hobby because every time I look at the scenery out of the window, I am always dreaming or thinking about something.

The student used 'I am' incorrectly instead of the auxiliary 'do' for the present simple question response and 'work at the scenery' is incorrect verb choice; 'look at' is correct for observing. Also 'out of window' needs the article 'the'. Use present simple for habitual actions (I do/look) and present continuous for ongoing states (I am always dreaming). Suggestions: replace 'I am' with 'I do' for short answers, use 'look at' instead of 'work at', and include 'the' before 'window'.

× Yes, and not not only outside the car window, but also outside the plane window, bus window, metro window.

✓ Yes, and not only outside the car window, but also outside the plane, bus, and metro windows.

The phrase repeated 'not' is an error and the preposition 'outside' is fine but articles and plural agreement are needed: when listing similar items use commas and make 'windows' plural for multiple types. Also include 'the' before a series of nouns or use plural 'windows'. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'not', use commas between items and use plural 'windows' at the end.

× Like every time I'm at uh.

✓ Like every time I'm travelling, uh, I take pictures.

The original fragment is incomplete and lacks a verb. To fit the context (habitual action during travel), use present continuous 'I'm travelling' or present simple 'I travel' and supply a main verb such as 'take pictures'. Suggestion: complete the sentence with a clear verb and choose the correct tense for habitual actions.

× I prefer the sea because it's, uh, so attractive how it's like, I've never been near the sea, but I think it's so it's so entertaining to watch how the waves and the water are in the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea because it's so attractive; I've never been near the sea, but I think it's very entertaining to watch the waves and the water.

Redundant phrases ('so it's like', 'it's so it's so') and awkward clause 'how the waves and the water are in the sea' should be simplified. 'I've never been near the sea' is present perfect and is acceptable, but combine clauses with a semicolon or separate sentences. Use 'watch the waves' rather than 'watch how the waves ... are in the sea'. Suggestion: remove redundant words, simplify structure, and use natural collocations like 'watch the waves'.