Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, conciseness and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant words (e.g. “usually always”), correct verb forms and prepositions, and reduce hesitation. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word for clarity.

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching local life and scenery. For example, I like observing houses, shops and people on the street as we pass through small towns, which helps me understand how people live in different places.

Suggestion: Fix accuracy and coherence. Use a concise topic sentence, remove filler words, correct collocations (e.g. “for memories of the trip”), and avoid unclear phrases (“make sure my food”). Give one specific example with a linking word to show purpose.

Example: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I want to keep memories of my trips. For example, when I see an attractive building or a colourful landscape, I quickly photograph it so I can remember the scene later.

Suggestion: Clarify grammar and reduce repetition. Begin with a direct answer, use correct verb agreement and smoother linking phrases (e.g. “because it makes me feel calm and peaceful”). Add a concise specific example of a memory to strengthen the response.

Example: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel calm and peaceful. For instance, walking along the beach with my family last summer and watching the sunset created happy memories that I still recall whenever I see the ocean.

× I usually always look out of the window at the scenery when I am travelling with my bus or my car.

✓ I almost always look out of the window at the scenery when I am travelling by bus or by car.

Use of adverb order and choice: 'usually always' is redundant and awkward; 'almost always' or 'usually' is correct. Preposition for vehicles: use 'by bus' or 'by car' (not 'with my bus'). Also avoid unnecessary possessive 'my' with modes of transport. Suggestion: use one frequency adverb and correct preposition 'by'.

× It is due to the fact that I really loves look at the nature and the environment of how people living in the world uh by.

✓ It is because I really love looking at nature and seeing how people live in the world.

Multiple issues: 'loves' does not agree with subject 'I' (should be 'love'). The verb 'look' should be in the -ing form after 'love' when referring to a general activity ('love looking'). 'the nature' is unnecessary; use 'nature' without 'the'. 'the environment of how people living in the world' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'seeing how people live in the world'. Also 'It is due to the fact that' is wordy — 'It is because' or 'Because' is simpler.

× I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window and due to the fact that I really love, uh, taking some photos for my for the memory of the travelling.

✓ I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I really love taking photos to remember my travels.

The conjunction should be 'because' to give reason. 'Taking some photos for my for the memory of the travelling' is wordy and unidiomatic: use 'taking photos to remember my travels'. Use plural 'travels' or 'travel' and remove extra articles. Keep 'love taking' with -ing form after 'love'.

× For example, when I look at a beautiful place or beautiful building, I always make sure my food.

✓ For example, when I see a beautiful place or building, I always make sure to take a photo.

The original sentence ends with 'make sure my food', which is nonsensical here. Likely intended 'make sure I take a photo' or 'make sure to take a photo.' Use 'see' or 'look at' and correct object 'building' without repeated 'beautiful'. Use infinitive 'to take' after 'make sure'.

× MMM I prefer the sea because looking at the sea make me feel calm and all and peaceful, so the view often bring back my happy memories of my of time spent of my with my family, which makes the seaside especially meaningful to me.

✓ I prefer the sea because looking at it makes me feel calm and peaceful, and the view often brings back happy memories of time I spent with my family, which makes the seaside especially meaningful to me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'looking at the sea make' should be 'looking at it makes'. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with 'the view'. Remove filler 'and all' and fix word order 'memories of my of time spent of my with my family' to 'memories of time I spent with my family'. Also use pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Ensure verbs agree with singular subjects.