Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 응답은 자연스럽고 명확하지만 더 구체적인 세부사항과 연결어를 사용해 문장을 더 논리적으로 만들면 좋습니다. 예를 들어 ‘changing scenery’가 무엇을 의미하는지(예: 도시에서 시골로 변하는 모습, 계절의 변화 등)와 그것이 왜 편안함을 주는지(예: 색깔, 소음 감소 등)를 덧붙이면 내용의 풍부함과 설득력이 높아집니다. 또한 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하고 중복을 줄이세요.

Example: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery, such as the shift from urban buildings to quiet countryside and the changing colours of the fields. Furthermore, seeing these gradual changes helps me relax by taking my mind off work and making the journey feel shorter.

Suggestion: 좋은 답변이지만 더 구체적인 예시와 이유를 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 예를 들어 언제 사진을 찍는지(아침/저녁), 어떤 장면을 선호하는지(해돋이, 산길, 강가 등), 그리고 사진을 어떻게 사용하는지(소셜 미디어, 개인 앨범) 등을 말하세요. 또한 연결어로 이유를 명확히 제시하면 흐름이 좋아집니다.

Example: Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window with my digital camera, especially during sunrise or when we pass mountain roads because the light and colours are dramatic. I find taking pictures refreshes me, and I often keep them in a personal album to remember the trip.

Suggestion: 의견은 분명하지만 문법 오류와 모호한 표현을 고쳐야 합니다. 특히 ‘the sounds of wave and scene is more beautiful’에서 문법(복수·단수)과 어휘 선택(‘scene’ 대신 ‘scenery’ 또는 ‘sight’)을 수정하세요. 또한 한두 개의 구체적 이유(예: 날씨, 활동, 분위기)와 연결어를 사용해 답변을 2~3문장으로 구성하세요.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love swimming and surfing in the summer, which I can’t do in the mountains. Also, the sound of the waves and the wide coastal scenery relax me more than mountain landscapes.

× For example, on long trips, they help me relax and make the journey more interesting.

✓ For example, on long trips, they help me relax and make the journeys more interesting.

The pronoun 'they' refers to 'scenery and the landscapes' (plural), but 'the journey' could be singular while trips are plural. To keep number agreement, change 'the journey' to 'the journeys' so it matches plural 'trips'. Suggestion: match singular/plural across related nouns to avoid ambiguity.

× Also the sounds of wave and scene is more beautiful.

✓ Also, the sounds of the waves and the scenery are more beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'wave' and 'scene' are incorrect noun forms; use plural 'waves' and 'scenery'. 'The sounds of the waves and the scenery' is plural, so verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Added definite articles 'the' for natural reference and a comma after 'Also' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and ensure subject-verb agreement (plural subjects take 'are').

× Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery and the landscapes.

✓ Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing scenery and landscapes.

Redundant use of both 'scenery' (uncountable) and 'the landscapes' (plural countable) is awkward. Removing 'the' before 'landscapes' or omitting one of the nouns makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: pair uncountable and countable nouns carefully; often 'scenery and landscape' or just 'the scenery' suffices.

× Yes, I usually take photos of the beautiful scenery and landscapes outside the car window with my digital camera.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of the beautiful scenery and landscapes outside the car window using my digital camera.

Placement of 'with my digital camera' is acceptable but 'using my digital camera' sounds more natural and clearly links the action to the instrument. No major grammatical error, but improved sentence flow and clarity. Suggestion: prefer 'using' for instruments to avoid ambiguity about what 'with' modifies.