Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Shorten and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Fix verb agreement and articles (e.g., “let me feel” → “makes me feel”, “this hustle and bustle city” → “the hustle and bustle of city life”).

Example: Yes. I often look out of the window when travelling by car because the trees and hills calm me down. For example, seeing green fields and distant ridges helps me relax after a busy week, so it feels like a welcome escape from the hustle and bustle of city life.

Suggestion: Make the answer grammatically correct and more precise. Provide a linking phrase and a brief reason with a concrete example. Correct phrasing: “they might be unforgettable” → “they create lasting memories” or “they help preserve memories.”

Example: Yes. I often take photos because they help preserve memories of places I visit. For instance, I photographed a coastal sunset last year and now I can remember the colours and who I travelled with whenever I look at the picture.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating earlier content verbatim. Give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “let me feels” → “makes me feel”) and reduce redundancy (avoid repeating “breathtaking scenery” and the same explanation).

Example: I prefer the mountains. I like them because the fresh air and quiet trails help me relax, and for example, hiking in the hills allows me to switch off my phone and enjoy peaceful views away from the city.

× Yes, I'm attracted to the breathtaking scenery when traveling by car because looking at the trees and hills helps to clear my mind and let me feels like a welcome escape from this hustle and bustle city life.

✓ Yes, I'm attracted to the breathtaking scenery when traveling by car because looking at the trees and hills helps to clear my mind and makes me feel like a welcome escape from this hustle and bustle city life.

Error: incorrect verb form after 'let' and subject-verb mismatch in 'let me feels'. The verb should be base form 'feel' after verbs like 'let' or 'make' that cause someone to experience something. Also 'helps to clear my mind and makes me feel' keeps parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'makes me feel' or 'lets me feel' and ensure the verb after 'me' is the base form 'feel'.

× Yes, because I think they might unforgettable memories and I can look back at them when I'm older to remember those memorable moments.

✓ Yes, because I think they might be unforgettable memories and I can look back at them when I'm older to remember those memorable moments.

Error: missing linking verb 'be' before past participle adjective 'unforgettable'. The phrase 'might be unforgettable memories' requires 'be' to link the modal 'might' with the adjective phrase. Suggestion: include 'be' after modals when forming probabilistic descriptions: 'might be'.

× I prefer the mountains because I'm attracted to the breathtaking scenery and when I'm looking at the trees and hills it helps to clear my mind and let me feels like a welcome escape from this hustle and bustle city life.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I'm attracted to the breathtaking scenery and when I'm looking at the trees and hills it helps to clear my mind and makes me feel like a welcome escape from this hustle and bustle city life.

Error: same issue as earlier — 'let me feels' is incorrect. Use 'makes me feel' or 'lets me feel' with the base verb 'feel'. Also keep parallel structure: 'helps to clear my mind and makes me feel'. Suggestion: replace 'let me feels' with 'makes me feel' and ensure verbs in coordinated clauses agree in form.