Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and concision. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct article and plural usage. Add a brief specific reason or example using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or train. I enjoy watching changing landscapes, such as farmland and small towns, because it helps me relax. For example, last month I spent an afternoon watching rice fields roll by on a two-hour train ride.

Suggestion: Make your answer clearer and more coherent. Give a concise reason and a short example. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and correct word forms.

Example: No, I usually don't take photos from moving vehicles because the pictures often come out blurry. For example, when I tried to photograph a sunset from a car last year, the image was too shaky to keep.

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Correct word choice (sea, not seeds) and avoid censored or unclear words. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. Also, there are fewer insects at the seaside, which makes it more comfortable for me.

× Yes, I like to watch scenery by windows or when I take a bus or trains. That's why I always choose trains or cars.

✓ Yes, I like to watch the scenery through the windows when I take a bus or train. That's why I usually choose trains or cars.

The phrase 'watch scenery by windows' uses incorrect prepositions and articles. Use 'watch the scenery through the windows' for correct preposition and definite article use. Also 'a bus or trains' mixes singular and plural; make them parallel: 'a bus or train' or 'buses or trains'. 'Always' was changed to 'usually' to sound more natural given preference statements but 'always' is not grammatically wrong.

× Well, I don't take photos scenery from cars or trains. That's because when they ride, uh, these kind of vehicles, the photos could be fuller. So, uh, one night, uh, stunned.

✓ Well, I don't take photos of the scenery from cars or trains. That's because when you ride in these kinds of vehicles, the photos often come out blurred. So, one night I was stunned.

Missing preposition: 'take photos scenery' should be 'take photos of the scenery'. Use 'ride in' for vehicles and 'these kinds of vehicles' (plural form). 'Could be fuller' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'blurred' or 'not clear'. 'One night, stunned' is a sentence fragment; add a subject and verb: 'one night I was stunned.' Use past tense 'was' to describe a past event.

× I prefer seeds to mountains because my hobby one of my hobby is swimming and actually I don't like bugs so being ***** is the best way to relax for me.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because one of my hobbies is swimming, and I don't like insects, so being at the seaside is the best way for me to relax.

Multiple structural and word choice errors: 'seeds' should be 'sea' and 'mountains' needs the definite article pairing 'the sea to the mountains'. 'My hobby one of my hobby is swimming' is ungrammatical; use 'one of my hobbies is swimming'. 'Bugs' is informal; 'insects' is clearer. 'Being *****' was unclear; context suggests 'being at the seaside'. Also improve preposition use: 'the best way for me to relax.'