Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, 'for example' or 'also'). Avoid redundancy and correct word choice (e.g., 'spot' instead of 'support', 'places' instead of 'place'), and keep to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, when I visit a new town I like to spot interesting buildings or parks that I may want to visit later. Also, watching the view helps me relax and prevents motion sickness, and it gives me a break from my phone.

Suggestion: Organize the answer into a clear topic sentence and two supporting points, correct grammar and awkward fragments, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'also', 'for example') and check noun/verb agreement ('photos help', 'landscapes').

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because beautiful landscapes help me remember a trip. For example, when the view is breathtaking I stop and capture it, and later I often share the best photos on social media. Also, looking back at these pictures brings back good memories.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, fix grammar and vocabulary errors, and limit to three supporting points with linking words. Correct repetition ('natural natural'), wrong phrases ('the year is freeze'), and incomplete sentences. Use specific examples (e.g., hiking, camping, sunrise) and connect them logically.

Example: I definitely prefer the mountains because I love hiking and exploring natural trails. For example, camping on a mountain and watching the sunrise feels peaceful and helps me relax. Also, mountains are usually quieter and less crowded than beaches, which I find more enjoyable.

× It's helped me to relax and pass the time.

✓ It helps me to relax and pass the time.

The sentence uses present perfect 'It's helped' which implies a completed effect; the context describes a habitual action when traveling, so present simple 'helps' is appropriate to show regular occurrence.

× Sometimes I support interesting things or place that I want to visit later.

✓ Sometimes I spot interesting places or things that I want to visit later.

The verb 'support' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'notice' or 'spot'. Also 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'things'. Use 'spot' and plural 'places' to convey noticing attractions for future visits.

× I love capturing beautiful landscape from the car, especially when I'm traveling.

✓ I love capturing beautiful landscapes from the car, especially when I'm traveling.

Countable noun 'landscape' in this context should be plural 'landscapes' or use an article 'the landscape'. Using plural fits the general idea of multiple scenes seen while traveling.

× Taking photos help me to remember a special trip.

✓ Taking photos helps me to remember a special trip.

The gerund phrase 'Taking photos' functions as a singular subject, so the verb must be singular 'helps' to agree with the subject.

× Not to take a picture.

✓ I sometimes choose not to take a picture.

The original fragment is ungrammatical; it lacks subject and correct verb form. Rewriting as a full sentence with subject 'I' and verb 'choose' makes the meaning clear.

× I often share this photo on social media.

✓ I often share these photos on social media.

Earlier sentences refer to 'photos' plural; if speaking generally, use plural 'photos'. If a single photo is intended, keep 'this photo' but consistency suggests plural.

× It's fun to look back at the time at the photos later.

✓ It's fun to look back at the photos later.

The phrase 'look back at the time at the photos' contains an extra 'at the time at'. Remove the unnecessary words and keep 'look back at the photos later' for clarity.

× I definitely prefer mountain.

✓ I definitely prefer the mountains.

When referring to mountains in general, use the plural 'mountains' or 'the mountains'. Singular 'mountain' is unnatural here.

× I love hiking and exploring natural natural trails.

✓ I love hiking and exploring natural trails.

The word 'natural' is repeated accidentally; remove the duplicate. 'Natural trails' is the correct phrase.

× The year is freeze and the scenery is just breathtaking.

✓ The air is crisp and the scenery is just breathtaking.

'The year is freeze' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended to describe cold or crisp conditions; 'the air is crisp' conveys that meaning and fits the present tense description.

× Mountains are quieter and less crowded than the beaches.

✓ Mountains are quieter and less crowded than beaches.

When making a general comparison, do not use 'the' before the second noun. 'Than beaches' is more natural for a general statement. Alternatively, 'than the beaches' can work if referring to specific beaches previously mentioned.

× I enjoy camping and watching the sunrise from a mountain top and it feels peaceful and help me to relax and it is a.

✓ I enjoy camping and watching the sunrise from a mountaintop; it feels peaceful and helps me relax.

The original sentence is run-on and has subject-verb agreement errors: 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Remove the trailing 'and it is a.' which is incomplete. Combine clauses with proper punctuation and correct verb forms.