Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct repetitions and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeated words, and use one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because" and "so"). Also correct small grammar issues: say "I feel very happy and relaxed" and avoid trailing fragments like "during a." Keep to 2–3 sentences and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "scenery," "green hills," "wildflowers").

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it relaxes me. For example, I enjoy looking at green hills, forests and wildflowers, which helps me unwind during long journeys.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words and repetitions. Begin with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and one example. Replace informal phrases like "kind of hobby in me" with "a hobby of mine" and correct grammar: "it is a hobby of mine and it makes me feel relaxed". Use linking words such as "because" and "so" to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often take photos and videos of the scenery outside because photography is a hobby of mine and it relaxes me. For example, I take pictures of interesting landscapes and later add them to a digital album to remember the trip.

Suggestion: Make a clear, direct choice and explain briefly with specific reasons. Correct grammar and word choice: use "prefer" not "prepare," say "I haven't visited the sea yet," and avoid repetitions like "but but" and "I I." Use linking words ("because", "although") and keep to two sentences: a topic sentence with preference and a supporting reason or condition. Mention concrete reasons (e.g., "I like hiking and cooler climate in the mountains") and a clear conditional plan if relevant.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the cooler climate there. Although I haven't visited the sea yet, I would like to go if my father can come with me so we can enjoy a family trip.

× Yes, I mostly look out the windows at the at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because I feel I feel very happy and relaxing watching the beautiful mountains, greenery, trees, forest and many different flowers and especially climate during a.

✓ Yes, I mostly look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because I feel very happy and relaxed watching the beautiful mountains, greenery, trees, forests, many different flowers, and especially the changing climate.

Errors: repeated words ('at the at the', 'I feel I feel'), incorrect article use ('the windows' should be 'the window' when referring to one window from a seat), wrong adjective/adverb choice ('relaxing' used for feeling should be 'relaxed'), missing plural for 'forest' when listing similar items and missing article for 'climate'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use singular or plural consistently based on meaning, choose correct adjective/adverb pair ('feel relaxed' not 'feel relaxing'), add 'the' before specific nouns like 'changing climate' and use commas in lists to improve clarity.

× Yeah, yeah, yeah. I usually take many photos and videos of the scenery outside the car window because it is also kind of hobby in me and I feel happy and relaxing taking it. And it can also be memory wall for for a long.

✓ Yeah. I usually take many photos and videos of the scenery outside the car window because it is kind of a hobby of mine and I feel happy and relaxed taking them. And they can also be memories for a long time.

Errors: wrong preposition and phrasing ('hobby in me' should be 'a hobby of mine'), incorrect article ('kind of hobby' -> 'kind of a hobby'), incorrect pronoun reference and number ('taking it' -> 'taking them' for photos and videos), repeated word ('for for'), and unnatural phrase 'memory wall' -> 'memories'. Suggestions: use 'of' to show possession, include the article 'a', match pronouns to plural nouns, and use 'memories for a long time' to express duration.

× To be honest I prepare both mountains and sea but until now I haven't visit any sea and I prefer going to mountains but but as as long as it goes good in my father coming here, I I would like to go see.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both the mountains and the sea, but until now I haven't visited the sea. I prefer going to the mountains, but as long as my father can come here, I would like to go see the sea.

Errors: wrong tense ('prepare' should be 'prefer'), incorrect past participle for present perfect ('haven't visit' -> 'haven't visited'), article use ('the sea' and 'the mountains'), repeated words ('but but', 'as as', 'I I'), and unclear phrasing about father's visit. Suggestions: use 'prefer' for preferences, use correct past participle with 'have/has' (visited), include definite articles when referring to specific places, remove duplicates, and rephrase the conditional clearly ('as long as my father can come here').