Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct basic grammar (tense, articles, subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Keep the answer under five sentences.

Example: I don't always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. Usually I feel tired or I prefer to read or use my phone, so I focus on those activities instead. However, if I am in a new place or the view is very interesting, I will sometimes watch the scenery.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with varied vocabulary rather than repeating phrases. Fix tense and phrasing (e.g., "it preserves memories" not "preserved"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and avoid redundancy.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because it helps me preserve memories of trips. For example, I like to photograph unusual landscapes or buildings so I can remember the place later and share the pictures with my family.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give two specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar (articles, plural/singular forms) and remove filler words (uh, I feel). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., peaceful, fresh air, hiking) and keep answer within five sentences.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy greenery and peaceful surroundings. The mountains offer fresh air and scenic hiking trails, so I find them more relaxing than the busy seaside. For instance, I like walking through forests and listening to birds, which helps me unwind.

× Not always because of that sometime I was tired and reading book and busy in my phone so I don't look outside at the window and don't attention so.

✓ Not always, because sometimes I am tired, reading a book, or busy on my phone, so I don't look out of the window or pay attention.

Multiple present-tense and word-choice errors: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb), 'I was tired' should be 'I am tired' to match habitual present, 'reading book' needs an article: 'reading a book', 'busy in my phone' should be 'busy on my phone', 'I don't look outside at the window' is unnatural—use 'look out of the window', and 'don't attention' is incorrect; use 'don't pay attention'. Use commas to separate actions for clarity. Suggested improvement: Use simple present for habitual actions and correct collocations (busy on my phone, pay attention).

× And moreover like I'm not that type of person who enjoy a new scenery and.

✓ Moreover, I'm not the type of person who enjoys new scenery.

Sentence has redundancy and structure problems. 'like' and 'and' are unnecessary filler words. 'that type of person who enjoy' has subject-verb agreement error—'person' (singular) requires 'enjoys'. 'a new scenery' is unidiomatic; 'scenery' is uncountable, so use 'new scenery' without 'a'. Suggested improvement: Remove fillers, ensure subject-verb agreement, and treat 'scenery' as uncountable.

× Yes, definitely. I take photos of the scene outside the car window because it preserved memories and I and I was a snap person and I capture every memory because it is memorable for us, because it is memorable.

✓ Yes, definitely. I take photos of the scene outside the car window because it preserves memories. I am someone who likes to take snaps and capture every memory because it is memorable for us.

Tense and phrasing errors: 'it preserved memories' is past tense but should be present 'it preserves memories' for a general truth. 'I and I was a snap person' is ungrammatical and mixes tenses—use 'I am someone who likes to take snaps' or 'I am a snapper' to express habit. Repetition 'because it is memorable' trimmed for clarity. Suggested improvement: Use simple present for habitual/general statements and avoid repetition; restructure awkward phrases into common collocations (take snaps, capture memories).

× Actually I'm a greenery person, so I prefer mountain because in mountain I can, I can see hills and more our mountainous areas.

✓ Actually, I'm a nature person, so I prefer the mountains because in the mountains I can see hills and other mountainous areas.

Several article and word-choice errors: 'a greenery person' is not idiomatic—use 'a nature person' or 'someone who likes greenery'. 'prefer mountain' needs plural 'the mountains' when speaking generally. Prepositional use: 'in mountain' should be 'in the mountains'. 'more our mountainous areas' is ungrammatical; use 'other mountainous areas'. Suggested improvement: Use 'the' with plural geographic features (the mountains) and choose idiomatic expressions (like 'someone who likes greenery' or 'a nature person').

× In mountain there are jungle and moreover, uh, I feel, I very feel enjoy and the atmosphere in mountain is peaceful so I feel so I prefer mountains.

✓ In the mountains there are forests, and I really enjoy the atmosphere because it is peaceful, so I prefer the mountains.

Tense and noun-form errors plus word order: 'In mountain' should be 'In the mountains'. 'jungle' as singular is odd—use 'forests' or 'jungle areas' depending on meaning. 'I feel, I very feel enjoy' is incorrect; use 'I really enjoy' or 'I enjoy it very much'. 'the atmosphere in mountain is peaceful' needs 'the mountains' and smoother phrasing. Suggested improvement: Use natural adverb placement ('really enjoy'), correct plural and article usage, and simplify the sentence to avoid fillers like 'uh' and repeated 'I feel'.