Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but can be improved by making it more concise, avoiding minor grammar errors, and adding one supporting detail with a linking phrase. Try to keep sentences varied and within five sentences. Specifically, change “to” at the end to “too,” combine ideas smoothly, and include a short reason or example of what you read or do on your phone.

Example: I usually keep the windows closed when I travel by bus or car because I get motion sick. Therefore, I prefer to read novels or play language apps on my phone to pass the time. For example, I often finish a chapter of a book on long trips, which helps me relax.

Suggestion: Good structure and relevant details. Improve by using more natural phrasing, avoiding repetition, and linking ideas with cohesive words (e.g., “however,” “so”). Also reduce wordiness and correct minor phrasing (e.g., “grab it” → “take it”). Add a brief specific example of a memorable photo to strengthen content.

Example: I often take photos of scenery from the car, especially when the landscape looks spectacular. However, I wait until the vehicle slows down or stops so the pictures are sharp. For example, last month I captured a clear photo of a field of sunflowers when we paused at a lookout point.

Suggestion: The answer gives a clear preference but has grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Improve by using correct comparative structure (“prefer the sea to the mountains”), combining ideas more naturally, and giving one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid self-deprecating phrases that undermine confidence; instead say you enjoy relaxing activities.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy sunbathing and swimming. In contrast, the mountains tend to involve long hikes and dealing with insects, so I usually choose the beach when I want to relax.

× When traveling by bus or car, I actually prefer to keep the windows closed because looking at the moving scenery makes me feel motion sick. So instead I prefer to read a book or look at my phone to.

✓ When traveling by bus or car, I actually prefer to keep the windows closed because looking at the moving scenery makes me feel motion sick. So instead I prefer to read a book or look at my phone.

No change needed for -ing form here; 'looking' and 'moving' are correctly used as gerunds/participles. However, remove the redundant 'to' at the end of the sentence. The original had 'to' which is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Suggestion: delete the final 'to'.

× When there is an opportunity for me to take photos of the scenery outside the car window, I immediately grab it, especially when I appreciate the beautiful landscape that I see.

✓ When there is an opportunity for me to take photos of the scenery outside the car window, I immediately grab it, especially when I appreciate the beautiful landscape I see.

The phrase 'that I see' is unnecessary and wordy; not a strict grammar error but stylistic. The sentence uses 'there is' correctly to indicate existence, so no change to 'there be'. Main improvement: remove unnecessary relative clause 'that' to make the sentence more natural. Also ensure pronoun reference of 'it' is clear (it = opportunity).

× I prefer pictures to be sharp and not blurry, so I want to take photos when the car is not moving.

✓ I prefer pictures to be sharp and not blurry, so I want to take photos when the car is not moving.

No preposition error present. The sentence is grammatically correct. 'Prefer pictures to be' is acceptable. Suggestion: could also say 'I prefer my pictures to be sharp' for clarity, but original is acceptable.

× I prefer the sea than the mountains because I appreciate the sun and swimming.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy the sun and swimming.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A than B'. Also changed 'appreciate' to 'enjoy' which collocates better with 'sun and swimming'. This fixes the preposition error and improves naturalness.

× On the other hand, the mountains offer insects and hiking and as a lazy person I prefer to unwind by the sea than go.

✓ On the other hand, the mountains offer insects and hiking, and as a lazy person I prefer to unwind by the sea rather than go hiking.

Multiple issues: 'prefer ... than go' is ungrammatical — use 'prefer ... rather than' or 'prefer ... to ...'. Also list of items needs clearer structure and parallelism. Reordered to 'rather than go hiking' and added comma for clarity. This corrects sentence structure and comparison usage.