Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles) and use precise vocabulary (orchard, countryside). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. My hometown is mostly countryside with orchards and many trees, unlike the city centre of Bangkok where you can see skyscrapers.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example) and avoid incorrect phrases (e.g., 'to kill them as my memory').

Example: Yes, I definitely take photos of buildings because architecture in different countries often has a unique style. For example, when I travelled to Kyoto I photographed traditional wooden temples to remember the trip.

Suggestion: Be specific and use correct names where possible. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the building you want to visit, then give brief supporting details (location, reason, historical significance). Use linking words (because, for example) and correct noun forms.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Forbidden City in Beijing, China because it is an enormous imperial palace with great historical significance. For example, I want to see its ancient halls and learn about the lives of past emperors.

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatical reason and one specific detail. Start with a direct answer, then explain briefly using linking words (because, so). Correct grammar (I have, earthquake experience) and avoid unclear vocabulary (torbetting).

Example: No, I do not want to live in a tall building because I experienced an earthquake before. As a result, I worry that evacuating from a high-rise during an emergency would be difficult and unsafe.

× Umm no, because around my hometown is usually some kind like the orchard with a lot of tree and no such a high building as it had in like the main city like Bangkok.

✓ Umm no, because around my hometown there are usually orchards with a lot of trees and no tall buildings like those in the main city, Bangkok.

The student used singular nouns where plurals are required ('orchard' -> 'orchards', 'tree' -> 'trees') and incorrect article and demonstrative use ('no such a high building as it had' is ungrammatical). Use plural forms when talking about more than one item and replace awkward phrasing with 'no tall buildings like those in the main city' for clarity and correct comparison. Suggestion: Count whether you mean one or many and use singular or plural accordingly; use 'there is/there are' for existence and 'like those' to compare plural nouns.

× Oh definitely yes I love to take photo of the building because I think the building in different country they have like the distinct style and some kind is like a unique.

✓ Oh definitely yes, I love to take photos of buildings because I think buildings in different countries have distinct styles and some are unique.

The student used incorrect noun forms and unnecessary filler words. Use plural 'photos' and 'buildings' when speaking generally. 'In different country' should be 'in different countries' (plural). 'They have like the distinct style' is ungrammatical; use 'have distinct styles'. 'Some kind is like a unique' should be 'some are unique' (correct verb and adjective use). Suggestion: Use plural forms for general statements, avoid filler 'like', and match subject and verb number.

× So I like to take a picture of them to kill them as my memory like I have visited there once.

✓ So I like to take pictures of them to keep them as memories of places I have visited.

The phrase 'to kill them as my memory' is incorrect and likely a wrong collocation. 'Kill' should be 'keep' or 'preserve', and 'memory' should be plural 'memories'. Also change 'I have visited there once' to 'places I have visited' to avoid redundant 'there'. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs for preserving memories ('keep', 'preserve') and match nouns in number (memories).

× Oh yes, I think the one that I want to be sit for now is kind of like a palette in Shane China.

✓ Oh yes, I think the one I want to visit now is the Palace of the Emperor in Xi'an, China.

The student used awkward and incorrect words: 'want to be sit' should be 'want to visit' or 'want to see'; 'palette' likely meant 'palace'; 'Shane China' is mispronounced/misspelled 'Xi'an, China'. Use the correct noun 'palace' and proper verb 'visit'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for travel intentions ('visit', 'see') and confirm proper nouns spelling.

× I'm not sure their name, but it's kind of like the emperor palace that the very big one, and it's had many historical, uh, memory in there.

✓ I'm not sure of its exact name, but it's an imperial palace, a very large one, and it has many historical artifacts and memories.

Errors: 'their name' should be 'its name' (singular pronoun for 'palace'); 'the emperor palace' is awkward—use 'imperial palace' or 'the emperor's palace'; 'it's had' is incorrect tense and auxiliary use—use 'it has'. 'Many historical, uh, memory' should be 'many historical artifacts and memories' or 'many historical sites'. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns for singular nouns ('its'), correct noun phrases ('imperial palace'), and present perfect/ present simple appropriately ('it has' for possession).

× No, as I has an experience about the earthquake before, I think living in torbetting some car sometime is kind of like a risk that if it has some, uh, some situation that it quite difficult to leave the building.

✓ No, as I had an experience of an earthquake before, I think living in tall buildings can be risky because if there is an emergency it can be quite difficult to leave the building.

Multiple errors addressed: 'I has' should be 'I had' (past tense and third person agreement); 'an experience about the earthquake' -> 'an experience of an earthquake' or 'an earthquake experience'; 'torbetting some car sometime' is unintelligible and likely meant 'tall buildings'; 'it has some... situation' should be 'there is an emergency' or 'there is a dangerous situation'. Use 'can be risky' to express general possibility. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement and past tense for past experiences ('I had'); use clear vocabulary ('tall buildings', 'emergency'); use 'there is/there are' to state existence.