Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use correct singular/plural forms and prepositions (e.g., “there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in downtown Shanghai”).

Example: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in downtown Shanghai. For example, the area is full of office towers and high-rise apartment blocks, so the skyline is very dense and modern.

Suggestion: Give a direct short answer, then add a specific reason and an example. Reduce hesitations and correct informal phrasing (e.g., “I don’t take many photos at home because I see the same buildings every day”). Use linking words like ‘however’ to connect contrasting ideas.

Example: Not really. I don’t take many photos of buildings where I live because I see the same skyline every day; however, when I travel to a new city I always photograph interesting skyscrapers to remember the trip and share with friends.

Suggestion: Be specific and accurate. Name the building correctly (e.g., “the Eiffel Tower”), give one clear reason and one brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar (e.g., “it symbolizes Parisian romance”).

Example: Yes. I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because I’ve always been fascinated by its design. Seeing it in person would be amazing since it’s an iconic symbol of Parisian romance and engineering.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a specific example of preferred housing. Avoid hesitations and informal fillers. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “high-rise apartment” and “outdoor space”).

Example: Not really. I’ve lived in both rural and urban areas and tried high-rise apartments, but I prefer houses with outdoor space because they feel warmer and more homely — for instance, a small house with a garden where I can relax and grow plants.

× Yes, there do have numerous top building besides my home 'cause I live in the downtown area of Shanghai.

✓ Yes, there are numerous tall buildings near my home because I live in the downtown area of Shanghai.

The sentence uses the wrong verb form and pronoun structure 'do have' and 'top building' is incorrect noun phrase. Use 'there are' for existence (There be issue, but categorized here as incorrect pronoun/structure) and plural 'buildings' with adjective 'tall'. Also replace informal 'cause' with 'because'. Suggestion: Use 'there are' + plural noun for existence and place adjectives before nouns (e.g., 'tall buildings').

× Uh, it's been fulfilled with those office tower or on top top building apartments.

✓ The area is filled with office towers and high-rise apartment buildings.

Original uses wrong verb tense and form 'has been fulfilled' and incorrect noun forms ('office tower' singular, 'on top top building apartments'). Use 'is filled with' to describe current state and plural nouns 'office towers' and 'high-rise apartment buildings'. Suggestion: Use 'is filled with' or 'is full of' for present-state descriptions and ensure noun-adjective collocation ('high-rise apartment').

× Not that often doing where I live in 'cause I'm already quite familiar with those looks, those at all buildings I have seen every day.

✓ Not that often, because I am already quite familiar with how the buildings look; I see them every day where I live.

Original uses incorrect gerund phrase 'doing where I live in' and awkward noun 'those looks'. Replace with clear clause 'I am familiar with how the buildings look' and move 'where I live' to correct position. Ensure sentence has a verb and clear subject. Suggestion: Use 'because' and form subordinate clause 'I am familiar with how...' and place adverbial phrases (where I live) appropriately.

× But if I travel into a new place or a new city, I would definitely take a few photos of those, umm, newly seen skyscrapers.

✓ But if I travel to a new place or city, I will definitely take a few photos of any newly seen skyscrapers.

Conditional mixed tense: use first conditional for likely future events: 'If I travel..., I will...' Replace 'would' with 'will' and 'travel into' with 'travel to'. 'Newly seen' is awkward; 'newly seen skyscrapers' or 'any skyscrapers I see for the first time' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'If' + present tense, then 'will' + base verb for real future conditions.

× Yes, I do like to visit a fair tower in Paris cause it's already fascinating to seeing it online and I definitely want to see this kind of iconic architecture in the real real real scene.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is fascinating to see online, and I definitely want to see this iconic architecture in person.

Mistakes: 'do like to visit a fair tower' likely intends 'Eiffel Tower' (proper noun), 'cause' should be 'because', 'fascinating to seeing' is ungrammatical; use 'fascinating to see' or 'fascinating when seen'. Repetition 'real real real scene' replaced with 'in person'. Also use modal 'would like' for polite desire. Suggestion: Use correct proper nouns, 'would like' for desires, 'because' for reasons, and 'in person' for seeing something physically.

× Umm it's more about and it's a architect symbolize Paris romantic.

✓ It's more than that: it is an architectural symbol of Paris and its romantic character.

Errors: 'a architect' should be 'an architectural' or 'an architect' but meaning is 'architectural symbol'; 'symbolize Paris romantic' is ungrammatical word order. Rephrase to 'architectural symbol of Paris and its romantic character'. Suggestion: Use correct article 'an' before vowel sounds, use adjective 'architectural' and proper noun phrases 'symbol of Paris'. Keep word order noun + of + noun.

× Umm, not really, uh, for me, I'm uh, I'm living in both rural and downtown urban areas, so I've experienced both kind of housing style and a high res, uh, high rise apartments.

✓ Not really. I have lived in both rural and downtown urban areas, so I have experienced both kinds of housing styles, including high-rise apartments.

Use present perfect 'have lived' to describe life experience up to now rather than present continuous 'I'm living' which implies current ongoing action. Use plural 'kinds' and 'housing styles', and 'high-rise apartments' as plural noun. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences and ensure noun-number agreement.

× Just not for me 'cause I feel it's quite cold and impersonal.

✓ It's just not for me because I feel they are quite cold and impersonal.

Referent ambiguity: 'it' should refer to 'high-rise apartments' (plural), so use 'they are' or rephrase to 'living there is'. Also replace 'cause' with 'because'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches referent; use 'they' for plural nouns or rephrase to avoid ambiguity.

× Uh, I prefer those house with outdoor space and more homely automatically.

✓ I prefer houses with outdoor space and a more homely atmosphere.

'Those house' should be 'houses' (plural) and 'homely automatically' is incorrect collocation. Use 'a more homely atmosphere' or 'a homier feel'. Suggestion: Use correct noun plurals and natural collocations like 'homely atmosphere' or 'homier'.