Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word forms (definitely, noisy, cars pass by), reduce repetition and add one specific detail. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast.

Example: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. However, although living in a tall building is convenient, it can be quite noisy because busy roads run alongside the apartment blocks and traffic passes by all day.

Suggestion: Use present simple for habits (I do / I like) and correct tense for past events. Give a concise topic sentence and a specific example with one linking word (for example/because). Avoid filler words and repair phrases.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially historic ones. For example, when I visited Beijing I took many photos of the Great Wall because it has a long history and is very famous.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and avoid literal translations. Use one clear topic sentence, correct grammar (the Great Wall is my favorite place I want to visit), and explain why with a specific reason. Replace unclear idioms with a brief explanation of the saying and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes — I would like to visit the Great Wall. Many Chinese people say that visiting the Great Wall is almost a must when traveling in China, and I want to see its impressive architecture and long history in person.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Correct grammar (If I lived in a tall building ... my life would change) and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would be more convenient — for example, shops and transport are usually nearby — and I would also enjoy the better views from higher floors.

× Definit definitely is a lot of tall buildings near my home.

✓ There are definitely a lot of tall buildings near my home.

The student used 'Definit definitely' (typo) and incorrect word order. English requires 'There are' to state existence of plural nouns and the adverb 'definitely' should come after the auxiliary. Also use 'a lot of' before plural noun. Suggestion: start with 'There are' then place adverbs after auxiliary: 'There are definitely a lot of tall buildings...'.

× Of course my home always a tall building, but I think it's a little bit noise because every day there are lots of car through my there.

✓ Of course my home is always in a tall building, but I think it is a bit noisy because every day lots of cars pass by there.

Multiple issues: missing verb 'is' for 'my home always a tall building' and wrong preposition/article. Use 'in a tall building' to show location. 'a little bit noise' is incorrect: use adjective 'noisy' and 'a bit' for degree. 'There are lots of car' should be plural 'cars'. 'Through my there' is incorrect; use 'pass by there' or 'pass by my home'. Suggestion: include 'is', use correct prepositions, plural nouns and adjective forms.

× There are lots of car thrown near my home.

✓ There are lots of cars parked near my home.

'Car' must be plural 'cars'. 'Thrown' is wrong verb here; likely meant 'parked' or 'stopped'. Also 'near my home' is fine. Suggestion: choose the proper past participle or adjective for the action (e.g., 'parked'), and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns.

× Yes, of course I did.

✓ Yes, of course I do.

The question 'Do you take photos of buildings?' is in present tense asking about a habit. Answer should use present simple: 'I do' or 'Yes, I do.' Using past 'did' incorrectly implies a single past event. Suggestion: match tense of question for habitual actions.

× Especially history buildings like when I was traveled in Beijing, I like take photos.

✓ Especially historic buildings; for example, when I traveled to Beijing, I liked taking photos.

Use adjective 'historic' or 'historical' rather than noun 'history' to modify 'buildings'. 'When I was traveled' is ungrammatical; use 'when I traveled to Beijing' (simple past). 'I like take photos' mixes tenses and form: for past context use 'I liked taking photos' or for general habit 'I like taking photos.' Also 'to Beijing' preposition needed. Suggestion: use correct adjective form, correct past tense verb, and gerund after like when describing activities.

× We took photos with the Great Wall.

✓ We took photos at the Great Wall.

Use preposition 'at' for visiting a landmark rather than 'with'. 'With' would imply using the Great Wall as a person or tool. Suggestion: use 'at' or 'on' depending on context ('on the Great Wall' if you were on top of it).

× It is, it has it had long history and it was so famous.

✓ It has a long history and is very famous.

Mixed tenses and redundancy: 'It is, it has it had' is wrong. Use present simple to state general facts: 'It has a long history' and 'is very famous.' Also include article 'a' before 'long history.' Suggestion: keep consistent present-tense statements for general facts.

× Yes, there is. The Great Wall is my favorite building where I would like to visit.

✓ Yes, there is. The Great Wall is my favorite site that I would like to visit.

Calling the Great Wall a 'building' is awkward; 'site' or 'place' is better. The relative clause 'where I would like to visit' is incorrect: use 'that I would like to visit' or 'which I would like to visit.' Suggestion: use appropriate noun for landmarks and correct relative pronoun or structure.

× And there is a old, old sentence in China.

✓ There is an old saying in China.

'A old' should be 'an old' due to vowel sound. 'Old, old sentence' is awkward; 'saying' or 'proverb' is natural. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds and choose correct noun 'saying.'

× If you don't want, if you didn't want to go to the Great Wall, you're not better human.

✓ The saying goes: 'If you do not go to the Great Wall, you are not a better person.'

The original mixes present and past conditions and uses 'you're not better human' which is ungrammatical; add article 'a' before 'better person' and use consistent present simple for the proverb: 'If you do not go...' If keeping intended meaning better phrasing: 'If you don't visit the Great Wall, you are not a true person' but 'better person' is unclear. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and include articles before singular count nouns.

× So I perfect like the Great Wall.

✓ So I really like the Great Wall.

'Perfect like' is incorrect collocation. Use adverb 'really' to modify 'like.' Suggestion: use common adverbs ('really', 'definitely') to express strong preference.

× Definitely yes I do.

✓ Definitely, yes, I do.

Punctuation and word order: add commas for clarity. The sentence is acceptable but needs small formatting. Suggestion: place 'yes' after a comma: 'Definitely, yes, I do.'

× If I lived in tall building, that means my life will change, will change.

✓ If I lived in a tall building, it would mean my life would change.

Conditional sentence: for unreal present use past simple in the if-clause and 'would' in the result clause. Also need article 'a' before 'tall building.' Repeating 'will change' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use second conditional structure: 'If I lived in a tall building, my life would change.'

× So convenience and of course I can have better view when I live in a tall building.

✓ It would be more convenient, and of course I would have a better view if I lived in a tall building.

Use adjective 'convenient' not noun 'convenience' to describe situation. Maintain conditional mood with 'would' for hypothetical. 'Better view' needs article 'a better view.' Suggestion: use appropriate adjective forms and correct conditional structure.