Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は質問に応えているが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な表現、そして詳細の提示方法が不自然です。改善点：1) 主語と情報を明確にする短い主文を使う。2) 関係代名詞や前置詞を正しく使う（e.g. “called” や “is about”）。3) 不要な繰り返しを避け、具体的な数字や色などの情報は一つの文でまとめる。4) 文章を2〜3文以内に収める。例文構成：主文で存在を述べ、続けて1文で特徴を説明する。

Example: Yes. In Colbert there is a very tall landmark called the Port Tower. It is painted red and is about 100 meters high, so it can be seen from many parts of the town.

Suggestion: 返答は肯定しているが、繰り返しや語順の混乱が多く、具体性が不足しています。改善点：1) 簡潔な主文で趣味を述べる（例：I enjoy photographing buildings.）。2) supporting detailとして頻度や理由、例を1文で加える（use linking words like “usually” or “because”）。3) 繰り返しを避け、代名詞の使い方を明確にする。4) 文は2〜3文に収める。

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings. I usually travel to places a little far from my home to find interesting architecture, and then I show my photos to friends and family.

Suggestion: 答えは明確で好ましいが、語法（visitの使い方）、重複、話の流れの自然さを改善できる。改善点：1) 一度で明確に主張する（I would like to visit the Sydney Opera House.）。2) 理由や背景を付け加える際は接続語（because / since / to）を使う。3) 同じ語の重複や不要な間投詞を避ける。

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Sydney Opera House in Australia because I have never been to Sydney and I want to see its famous architecture and enjoy sightseeing there.

Suggestion: 意見ははっきりしているが、表現の自然さと語彙の正確さが必要です。改善点：1) 好みを述べる際は自然な表現を使う（I wouldn't like to live in a tall building.）。2) 理由を述べるときは具体的かつ簡潔に（e.g. I am afraid of heights because of past experiences on roller coasters.）。3) 冗長な語の繰り返しを避け、文を2文以内にまとめる。

Example: I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I am afraid of heights. For example, I dislike roller coasters since the high drops make me feel very uncomfortable.

× Yes, in Colbert there is a very tall tower with which name is port tower, which color is red and which is which tow is about 100 meters.

✓ Yes, in Colbert there is a very tall tower called the Port Tower; it is red and is about 100 meters tall.

The original sentence misuses relative clauses and word order for naming and describing. Use 'called' to give a name: 'a tower called the Port Tower'. Use simple clauses for color and height: 'it is red' and 'is about 100 meters tall'. Also add the definite article 'the' for a specific named building. Suggestions: break the ideas into clearer clauses and use 'called' for names and 'tall' after the measurement.

× Yes, I like to take it, take a photo and I usually visit some places where it's far from my house and I take I take the I take them and I show that I show them to my friends or family.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos. I usually visit places that are far from my house, I take pictures and show them to my friends or family.

The sentence has awkward repetition and incorrect structure. Use the gerund 'taking' after 'like' for general preference. Replace 'where it's far from my house' with a relative clause 'places that are far from my house'. Remove repetitions and use 'pictures' or 'photos' consistently, then 'show them to my friends or family'. Suggestions: avoid repeated words, use gerunds for likes, and use clear relative clauses.

× Yes, I I want to visit Opera House in in Sydney, Australia. I have never visit Sydney and my dream is to visit to there and and umm enjoy, see enjoy sightseeing there.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the Opera House in Sydney, Australia. I have never visited Sydney, and my dream is to go there and enjoy the sightseeing.

The verb 'visit' in the present perfect requires the past participle 'visited' after 'have'. Use the definite article 'the' before 'Opera House' and remove extra preposition in 'visit to there'—use 'go there' or 'visit there'. Also 'enjoy sightseeing' is the correct phrase. Suggestions: use past participle with present perfect, include articles for specific landmarks, and simplify redundant words.

× I don't think so because I don't like high place.

✓ I don't think so because I don't like high places.

The noun 'place' should be plural 'places' when speaking about high locations in general. The sentence otherwise is correct. Suggestion: use plural for general statements about types of locations.

× From my experience I hate roller coaster because it goes high placed and down down at very high speed.

✓ From my experience, I hate roller coasters because they go up high and down very quickly.

'Roller coaster' should be plural 'roller coasters' when speaking generally. 'Goes high placed' is ungrammatical; use 'go up high' or 'rise high'. Use the adverb 'quickly' instead of the adjective 'high' for speed. Also use 'they' to agree with plural. Suggestions: use plural nouns for generalizations, correct verb phrases for movement (go up/down), and adverbs for manner.