Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give specific, relevant details (types of buildings, distance, how they affect you). Use linking words for coherence.

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a 15-storey commercial block housing a McDonald’s and a supermarket is two blocks away, and a nearby shopping mall with a donut shop and restaurants is about a five-minute walk. These buildings make the area feel busy and convenient.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, then add specific details about when, why and how you photograph buildings. Avoid filler words and repetition; use linking words like 'because' or 'when' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often photograph buildings because architecture is one of my hobbies. For instance, when I travel or walk around my neighbourhood, I take photos of striking facades, unusual angles, or historic details to capture their character.

Suggestion: Answer directly and be specific about the building and reasons for interest. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations; mention the building's name, its historical significance, and what you hope to see there.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Historical Archive at the University of Zurich because it contains documents and exhibitions about Switzerland during World War II. I’m interested in seeing original records and learning how the country was affected during that period.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'so'). Remove hesitations and repetition to sound more fluent.

Example: No, I prefer not to live in a very tall building because I already live on the top floor of a 20-storey block and miss seeing nature. For example, a three- or four-storey building would let me watch birds and feel more connected to trees and street life.

× Yes, I have tall buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home.

The original sentence uses 'I have' which implies possession; the Examiner asked about existence near the home. This is a 'there be' context and also involves article/structure choice. Use 'there are' for plural existence. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' to state existence rather than 'I have'.

× For example, I have a big building consisting of Nicole and McDonald's in their big basement.

✓ For example, there is a big building housing Nicole and McDonald's in its basement.

'Consisting of' is incorrect here; use 'housing' or 'that houses' to indicate businesses located inside. Also 'their big basement' is wrong because 'building' is singular; use 'its basement'. Use 'there is' for existence. Suggestion: use 'a building housing X and Y in its basement.'

× Also, I have another building that sells Donuts and chickens.

✓ Also, there is another building that sells donuts and chicken.

Use 'there is' for existence. Capitalization: 'Donuts' should be lowercased unless a brand. 'chickens' as a food item is uncountable when referring to meat; use 'chicken'. If referring to live animals, keep plural but context implies food. Suggestion: use 'there is another building that sells donuts and chicken.'

× These are examples of large buildings and tall ones that are located near my home.

✓ These are examples of large, tall buildings located near my home.

Sentence is wordy and awkward. 'Large buildings and tall ones' is redundant; combine adjectives before the noun and remove the unnecessary relative clause. Suggestion: use concise adjective order 'large, tall buildings located near my home.'

× Yes, I do that when it Since one of my hobbies is to take photos, I of course take photos of buildings as well.

✓ Yes. Since one of my hobbies is photography, I of course take photos of buildings as well.

Original is fragmented and contains a stray 'when it'. Simplify: 'Since one of my hobbies is photography' is more natural. Avoid repetition 'take photos' twice. Suggestion: form a single clear sentence explaining the reason.

× For example, I would take photos of nice buildings that look awesome, and I would also take photos of buildings that are that look very unique.

✓ For example, I would take photos of nice, impressive buildings, and I would also photograph buildings that look very unique.

'That look awesome' is informal; use 'impressive'. The phrase 'that are that look' contains duplication. 'Very unique' is illogical because 'unique' is absolute; use 'quite unique' or just 'unique'. Also replace second 'take photos of' with 'photograph' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: avoid duplications and choose appropriate modifiers for 'unique.'

× A building I would like to visit once is a building located in Switzerland.

✓ One building I would like to visit is located in Switzerland.

'A building I would like to visit once' is odd; 'once' misplaced. Simplify to 'One building I would like to visit is located in Switzerland.' Suggestion: place 'once' only if indicating a single-time visit: 'I would like to visit once' after the clause.

× This building is located inside the University of Zurich at Switzerland, and this building is historically very unique and memorable in a sense that it stores a history of, uh, war between Switzerland and World War 2.

✓ This building is on the University of Zurich campus in Switzerland, and it is historically unique and memorable because it preserves memories of World War II.

Use 'on the campus' or 'at the University of Zurich' rather than 'inside the University of Zurich at Switzerland.' 'In Switzerland' is correct, not 'at Switzerland.' 'Stores a history of war between Switzerland and World War 2' is ungrammatical and factually awkward; use 'preserves memories of World War II.' Use 'World War II' instead of 'World War 2.' Suggestion: use 'on the campus' and clearer phrasing for historical significance.

× Not quite, I am already living in tall building where I'm living in 20 story building on the very top floor.

✓ Not really. I already live in a tall building; I'm on the very top floor of a 20-story building.

Use simple present 'I live' rather than continuous 'I am living' if describing a habitual or current residence. Missing articles: 'in tall building' should be 'in a tall building.' Word order improved: 'on the very top floor of a 20-story building.' Suggestion: use 'I live' and include appropriate articles and hyphenation for '20-story.'

× If I could live in the lower building for like that, like uh, four story or three story building, it'll be better to see birds fly by or feel the nature.

✓ If I could live in a lower building, like a three- or four-story one, it would be better for seeing birds fly by and feeling closer to nature.

Conditional needs 'would' instead of 'it'll' for a hypothetical: 'it would be.' Use articles 'a three- or four-story one.' 'Feel the nature' is incorrect; use 'feel closer to nature' or 'enjoy nature.' Suggestion: use conditional 'would,' correct article use, and clearer natural phrasing.

× Therefore I would umm rather prefer to live in a low story building than tall ones.

✓ Therefore, I would prefer to live in a low-rise building rather than a tall one.

'Would rather prefer' is redundant; use 'would prefer' or 'would rather.' 'Low story building' is incorrect; use 'low-rise building.' Match singular/plural: 'a tall one' vs 'tall ones' for parallelism. Suggestion: use concise phrasing 'I would prefer to live in a low-rise building rather than a tall one.'